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Unfinished Business
by Linda Ames
Thursday, May 04, 2006
Rated "PG" by the Author.
For dad: for what we missed
For someone contemplating suicide: beyond the pain, there is help. it is not always the best out and i hope this helps to change your mind.
For others who have survived a loved one's death by his/her own hand: it is not your fault; it is never your fault; you could not have prevented it.
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He, fractious father; raging river headed downstream, crashing upon rocks,
plummeting into churning pools,
darting off in self-determined direction.
She, errant daughter; frightened child
adrift on meagerly crafted raft, without
paddle or pole to steer, desperate
to navigate his currents.
For them, life was rarely lukewarm.
They found themselves on opposing ends.
Blazing lava to frozen tundra,
Devastating detestation to passionate adoration.
She studied him for clues
To meet his expectations
To receive his understanding
To find his acceptance.
His words left her speechless.
His anger left her sobbing.
His intellect left her impotent.
Yet, she hungered for his love.
Just as they discovered common ground
where they could draw close,
create warm spirit between,
place tender kiss upon a cheek,
he abandoned her, when
she found him in a pool of blood
shotgun in hand, silent.
Peace, at last, for him.
Linda Farmer Ames © May 4, 2006
All Rights Reserved
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| Reviewed by Linda Law |
3/16/2009 |
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| Linda, this is such an agony filled poem... Your word crafting is very well done, even as you write about such a horrible tragedy...We certainly can not understand the whys.. unfortunately...living with those why's must be difficult, especially when the person is so close to us... I pray that you are always healing... hugs, lindalaw |
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| Reviewed by David Hightower |
5/2/2008 |
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Linda - Sad but profound poem. Excellent use of imagery and metaphors. The last line leaves melancholy,
Peace, at last, for him.
- leaving her to deal with life. Tragic and touching poem. - David |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
5/7/2006 |
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| though this is a distrubing poem, i applaud your strength in writing it ... |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
5/5/2006 |
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A stark, real and most meaningful account, Linda. Thank you for sharing it even though it must be very painful to write. Love, peace, strength, and healing to you,
Regis |
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| Reviewed by Bill Broome |
5/5/2006 |
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It's damn tough to write one like this. I'm glad you did, and in doing so, you made an outstanding work of it. Graphic. Deep regret, and a whole lot of Anguish that you need to put to rest... if you can.
- Bill
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| Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner |
5/5/2006 |
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Linda,
Powerful, poingnat piece; very well done; leaves the reader bereft.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla. |
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| Reviewed by George Carroll |
5/5/2006 |
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| A poignant write that leaves one to grieve with you. |
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| Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader) |
5/5/2006 |
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| Hell of a reality-based narrative piece of superb poetical expertise. Truly heart-catching. |
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| Reviewed by Connie Hinnen Cook |
5/4/2006 |
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| We're both writing about suicide today. So tragic when someone thinks that's the only option. This descriptive piece shows the struggle between daughter and dad to find a common ground. Well written and powerful. |
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| Reviewed by Steve Joos |
5/4/2006 |
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| So sad in so many ways. A shattering piece. I can understand the pain of the daughter trying to earn her father's acceptance and the horror of seeing him dead by his own hand. |
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