Saving the Day {for the Moment}
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Phyllis Jean Green
Monday, January 25, 2010
Rated "PG13" by the Author.
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Saving the Day {for the Moment}
Above the head of my bed is a window I think of as belonging
in one of those block-long cruise ships. Nearly as wide as
my queen but a mere thirty inches tall, it sports blinds
the color or sex, were sex furred dust gray. Old and grizzled
though they be, they make light zebra the dog-gnawn
spread to the point where sunflowers spring to life.
Shifting stripes only breathe more.
By being particular about the angle
at which the blinds tilt, it is possible to get the day
to perform more magic with its store of light.
Careful! Tilt too little, the light lolls shamelessly
on shams. Too much, and the day gets miffed,
puts out its lantern, and skulks – I think – to a home
where it feels welcome. Get the tilt right, the whole
room seems to glow as light and shadow cavort.
Work, but the way I see it, someone has to save
the day. However tiny one’s part. Look at it
from a distance, a dust mote is huge by comparison.
So stretch it. Not going to last, so while it does,
give it the respect it deserves. Love it enough to
give it its own time and space. Really see – no,
I mean see. Delight in watching it at work
and at play. Keep still and out of the way,
hard to believe the show.
Job isn’t done, of course. Got to angle the blinds
just so as the day commences to enter the throes
of death. As it lies on the bed rejecting all efforts
to cover and straining to make sure its last words
penetrate even the thickest of heads. Times when
death comes so fast, there is no time to conduct
the saving ritual. Luckier times, I try to show
I am happy to help see that the day returns to
its maker knowing it has been treasured
to its last breath. This is one gift
that expires lightning fast.
Spending mine
n o w.
(c) Phyllis Jean Green, 2010
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| Reviewed by William Bonilla |
2/7/2010 |
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excellent write Pea
enjoyed your imagery
Love & Peace
William |
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| Reviewed by Sheila Roy |
1/30/2010 |
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A very interesting perspective. Your writes seem so tangible and down-to-earth. I like the mood you set for this moment, too. Well shared:)
Sheila |
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| Reviewed by R.D. Pounds |
1/30/2010 |
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Pea~ I stopped by to offer you a belated Happy Birthday! and was drawn to this poem by its title. What a delight to read about your efforts, your enjoyment of the results, and all the thoughts in between. Sometimes being late is a good thing: I also enjoyed the comments already posted here, but Pea...I never really thought of 'saving the day' quite in the way you did here. Thank you for opening my perspective's window.
Thanks for being You! and many, many happy returns!
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| Reviewed by Sheri Uy |
1/29/2010 |
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Hello dear Pea, deeply meaningful write. Truly captivating. Thank you for sharing. Blessings to you.
Love,
Sheri |
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| Reviewed by Elizabeth Price |
1/27/2010 |
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| Such depth to a simple process, but that is what you do best. Love it. Liz |
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| Reviewed by Kate Burnside |
1/26/2010 |
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| such wonderful mood and evocation, Pea... but have to thoroughly agree with the Board: in this instance, Jerry has expressed the quintessential which perhaps we might ALL have wished to be able to articulate and voice so well, and I tip my hat to both you and to him for bringing us such a complete work of both writing and response. A fine combination, thank you! :)) xx |
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| Reviewed by Bennett Kremen |
1/26/2010 |
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| You helped save my day with this poem. |
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| Reviewed by Carin' Spirit |
1/26/2010 |
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| Oh Pea!! I almost missed this one. A very clever, subtle write, I had to read twice. Love it. ;~} Always be well, Carin |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
1/26/2010 |
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I think I shall simply echo Jerry's words as he has said it so well and I would not presume to improve on his "take" of your poem. Lovely, deep work, Pea. Thank you. Love and best wishes,
Regis |
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| Reviewed by Rose Rideout |
1/26/2010 |
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How very beautiful you made it for our eyes Phyllis.
Newfie Hugs, Rose |
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| Reviewed by Liana Margiva |
1/26/2010 |
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| EXCELLENT!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva |
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| Reviewed by L. Figgins |
1/25/2010 |
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| Love this. Have you noticed the different qualities of light in each season, P.? Early Autumn's my favorite, the light is pure gold. Wonderful the way you bring us into your unique view of the world and the quality of your expression. Enjoyed! |
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| Reviewed by Susan de Vegter |
1/25/2010 |
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Most excellent word painting of the softness of observation and the beauty of your woman spirit.
Blessings and love,
Susan |
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| Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan |
1/25/2010 |
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| how very cool! love the write! |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
1/25/2010 |
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I loved this one, in our new apartment because of the height and the fact that there are so many windows we do have blinds on every window as well as curtains and drapes. It does often seem like a full time job just adjusting them to get them the way we want them.
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
1/25/2010 |
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Pea,
Wouldn't presume to add anything to what Jerry's said, he's said it all and said it very well...just to say as always I love your work and the elegant fluency of your writing.
John |
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| Reviewed by Jerry Bolton |
1/25/2010 |
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| WoW! Phyllis, when you get into descriptive evolution you go whole hog, much to your readers delight. I was right there with you as you twisted, bent and shaded those blinds to bring out the exquisiteness of the painting above the bed. Your tedious work with the blinds to get that perfect, slanted ray shining through them was a herculean effort that I grunted when grunts were needed, frowned when things were not going right and applauded your trial and errors for even undertaking this undertaking of showing Mother Nature a trick or two yourself. In the end, and all and all, I believe you were triumphant with your endeavor, at least you were in this much appreciative reader's opinion. |
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| Reviewed by Roger Ochs |
1/25/2010 |
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| A write a rich as a chocolate mousse and just as delicious. |
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