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* Usually don't explain my poems, but this one is special, it's for Josie...A 13 year old girl, who has suffered so much, she lost her mother a few months ago, and struggles to live with the memories of finding her dead..She blames herself..

Rat Dreams

Symbols of hidden reality,
Hidden in meanings
We often do not fathom,
Until it’s too late,
And we are doomed,
To our fate…

But if you listen,
They will tell you things,
Show you a way to bring,
Yourself from the outer dark…

I dreamed of rats,
Swimming in a pool,
Eating all the food,
I didn’t want,
Can’t choke it down,
It sticks in my throat,
Like the words I try to say…

Large and ugly,
Yet I look at them without fear,
Until I saw you swimming in the pool,
Trying to escape…

Only then did my heart fail,
And I looked around for a way to save you!
A thin rope hung nearby,
Was it strong enough?
Were you?

I watched as you struggled,
Stifling a scream as they crawled on you,
Seeking escape too…

But your strength of will!
Your love of life,
Gave you strength,
And you pulled yourself free…

You cried on my shoulder,
Saying thank you,
You saved me!

But the truth is my sweet Josie,
You saved yourself!
Pulled yourself from the misery,
And sewer of your life,

You are free now sweet one,
Close your eyes and sleep,
No more nightmares for you!
No more Rat Dreams for me-

The future waits for you!
I see it in your eyes,
You can finally live your life,
As it was meant to be…

Beautiful and free…

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Reviewed by Vickie Yannuzzi
You truly have captured the depth of feelings...
Reviewed by Marilyn Seray
whew! I made it. My episode pales in comparison to this.

this reached way down there in my heart and stayed for a while.
I am so glad that Josie has you for a friend. You are full of compassion.
Reviewed by Simon Thurlow (Reader)
Amazing how durable kids actually are....especially given the horrors that many of them are forced to face. A wonderful write in tribute to her. She is a tough kid it would seem.
Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson
Glad the 13 year old is pulling through. Glad your not having the dreams. An awesome poem here for your friend.......
Reviewed by Sanil nath (Reader)
This was so excellent write ... Most Beautiful and it got shaped so beautifully as you mentioned ... sometimes more that ... Thanks a lot for sharing this lovely piece of work ...

I'm so proud of you ...
Reviewed by E T Waldron
Reindeer! I'm awed by your ability to write such depth of
the horror someone of that age faces, when they go through
trauma. You are a very compassionate person with a beautiful
heart and wisdom gained from having suffered so much yourself
as a child. This is superb poetry!You must do counseling!
Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya
Excellent write....BHUWAN
Reviewed by Dale Clark
Sad but there is hope. You've
captured that. Great!
Reviewed by S. Ganguli Prometheus_Media
excellent poem
Reviewed by Rebekah Rosie Lang
Very sad. I hope she breaks free.
Excellent poem!
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
Awww, this is really sad.DO NOT READ MY POEM...this is heartwrenching, take care beaut..
Reviewed by John Banasiewicz Jr
I hope that at this early age she can see her future and be free and live a life beautiful and free,
Touching write
Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader)
So sad, yet triumphant as well! An excellent piece, and the reasoning behind it makes it even more grand! You my dear friend Rein have a heart and soul I wish all the world could have!!!!
Reviewed by Trixie Love
Hi Retta,
This deeply touched my heart.
So painfully sad...

Beautifully written...

Trixie :)
Reviewed by Franz Kessler
Powerful write, Retta - dreams carry messages, this one in particular. Never does the sun shine brighter than after a night of misery. Franz
Reviewed by Leysa Lowery
Retta, tough write but with a sense of hope. We all must save ourselves, and the miracle is that we do have the power inside to do just that if we only realize it. Good write!
Reviewed by M. Brown
Retta, this is a hard read, taxing but exhilaratingly beautiful. You hand out hope with your words . . . words rushing down pathways of our experiences with the dark. Thanks for proving it [unrelenting possibilities abound] with the voice I hear calling through your pen. Keep encouraging! Keep giving hope to all!

a satisfying read,
Reviewed by Kate Burnside
Powerfully written, Retta, enabling us to share Josie's pain and your desire to console and heal. It is astounding that children take on guilt for everything that goes wrong in their young lives and we can carry these thoughts with us into our adulthood, assuming responsibility for everything. Josie is blessed to have a loving, patient friend to help absolve her and absorb the grief. Better out than in...internalisation is where the damage can compound. But it will doubtless take much time and a superabundance of "good things" to affirm her. Thank you for the privilege of being allowed to help carry the burden for this young girl with you in some way. I will pray that a complete work of recreation and restoration will go on in her life... God cannot bring her mother back, but He can miraculously remove the pain of the loss, I believe. Bless you and this was astutely written. Kate xx
Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner

i can't imagine that horror of finding your own mother dead...what a heartbreaking read! (((HUGS))) to your little friend josie, and to you (((HUGS))) for caring enough to post this courageous write

(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :( *tears*
Reviewed by Ann Piatt
Very nice use of metaphors here! The analogy works so well. It is difficult to overcome the kind of nightmare your young friend must deal with inside of her mind...eventually the pain and "haunting" will lessen...even if it does always remain somewhere back in the deepest recesses. Yet, as you skillfully display, with can be overcome and lead to becoming even stronger for the struggle. Well done!
Reviewed by *********** ********** (Reader)
So sad....You have written an excellent poem Retta....

You have a good and kind heart......and a hopeful pen......your words are always moving and soulful......and just plain BEAUTIFUL.

ty, Dani
Reviewed by Jack Roberts
That is sooooo sad :( Well done Retta.

Reviewed by Tami Ryan
As one who works with abused children, I know how tormenting it can be to share in their pain. It is only through the hope and belief that we express in and for them that they can grow strong. Thank you for believing in Josie and for being a mentor and role model. The blessings will be returned to you a thousand fold.

Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger
Always very sad, whenever children are involved, but you have handled it well. Excellent write Poet, and the graphic OH MY, had me standing on the chair! Keep The Faith.
Reviewed by Mr. Ed
Kudos for penning this powerful piece for young Josie. Truly hope her nightmares and guilt go away.

PS That is one awesome graphic, Reindeer!
Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
So sad Retta, grips the heart. Well penned as always.
Reviewed by George Carroll
A sad part of life, well written and our prayers go out to the little one in her grief.
Reviewed by Paul Berube
Retta, sad but excellent write. It is something how the mind of a child can take on such a persecution complex. I once heard a little child say, " maybe if I was good mommy would have stayed." To console is a big part of the healing.
Reviewed by Lisa Hilbers
Retta, the mind plays ugly games with us sometimes. We can only keep her in our prayers that she finds peace through the storm.
Time will cover the wounds she has suffered, but forgiving herself is hard part.
A touching and frightful write Retta. Lisa
Reviewed by Debashish Haar (Reader)
HEARTFELT write, usual wonderfully written, friend!
Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
Very heartfelt Retta!!

Love Tinka
Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
Rein this is painful and powerful...
My heart too goes out to her....
TY for sharing this one.

lady Peg
Reviewed by Lori Moore
This is outstanding. My heart goes out to your young friend.
Reviewed by jude forese
in time, she will overcome her demons ... powerful metaphor of evil and darkess eradicated from life experience ...
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