Vacant Mask
by ~Indigo~ Elga
Tuesday, July 06, 2004
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Vacant Mask
Have you ever felt such heartache,
complete and utter desolation,
wounded and battered feelings,
hidden behind a vacant mask?
So much pain you hide,
and hold so deep within,
words are but a vehicle,
that emotions travel in.
This is only but a notion,
that barely brushes upon the skin,
tattooed, ingrained,
and scorched within your soul-
is an everlasting message,
and emotions uncontrolled.
Tears of acid raindrops,
burn and sear the mind,
rolling to the foothills,
of this our tragic start.
Love was all consuming,
elations rode on high
swept away with gusto,
I held nothing back,
gave so freely so willingly,
all this love I had,
believing it would be nurtured,
reciprocated love !
In a brief encounter,
we met across elusive time,
I fell in love, but lost it all,
now feeling like a clown.
Painted smile is how I'll greet you,
do you know the pain I feel?
Rejection comes completely,
to this heart that will not heal.
E. Bretton
© 2004 All Rights Reserved
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| Reviewed by Dale Clark |
7/9/2004 |
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| This is a haunting work. I feel your pain. |
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| Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU |
7/8/2004 |
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"Vacant Mask" flows the emotions and depicts the feelings duly poemized and sublimely poetized on the cadence of the sounds of passion. It is flower from the garden of humanity scented with the aroma of sublimity.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
7/7/2004 |
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| powerfully painful poetry ... |
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| Reviewed by ~ Chanti |
7/7/2004 |
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Elga, I know we have not commented much on one another's poetry but that is because we are friends in real life and speak daily on the telephone...so you KNOW what I think of this incredible poem. BRILLIANT!!!! You are a true artist and your skill is growing daily.
Much love...Chanti |
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| Reviewed by Dawn Richerson |
7/6/2004 |
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| Elga, painful and moving poem. Thank you. Dawn |
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| Reviewed by C. McGovern-Bowen |
7/6/2004 |
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| "...we met across ellusive time..." Very nice imagery here, Elga. Wonderful flow. MOving tone. Haven't we all played the clown? Deeply wounded hearts given in earnest take much time to mend; but scars do remain. This piece really grips the reader. Worthy of repeat reads! |
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| Reviewed by Fletcher Bailey (Reader) |
7/6/2004 |
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| Elga...love the artwork...which sets off prefectly this wonderful piece of soulful poetry...Fletcher B |
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| Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner |
7/6/2004 |
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(((elga)))
this is how i feel at times--you've captured me perfectly
stunning work, poet!
(((HUGS))) and love, karla. :( |
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| Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger |
7/6/2004 |
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| WOW!!!… Now Elga, you do know this is most definitely not some figment of imagination!!!… It is just another stunning example of how polished powerful poetry at its finest should be created, Poet!!!… Bravo!!!… Bravo!!!… Bravo!!!… Outstanding work!!! |
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| Reviewed by Sandie Angel |
7/6/2004 |
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Powerful emotion, Elga. The feeling of lost, sad and emptiness all written into this poem.
Sandie May Angel :o( |
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| Reviewed by Martin Hebert |
7/6/2004 |
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Elga~~so tragic and sad~~touches my soul~~
~~marty~~ |
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| Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader) |
7/6/2004 |
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| This is so very powerful and raw, brought my tears. Exceptional poem. |
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