by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
Monday, February 21, 2005
Rated "G" by the Author.
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I have NO idea where this one came from. I just wrote it the way it came. I'm fine. Really!
THREE MORE DAYS...
i'm born inna rush of blood
that flow like
a river onto the bed
of pain where
my mama lie sweatin and
writin mad poems for me--
who will take over when she
an go on drunkin cruises
while i write
takin my first timid steps
the footprints of a master--
who is never satisfied
with my words
she slap them out of my pen
abject frustration and rage
how could her
daughter not know how to write--
i didn't ask for this job
run away an not come back
be the poet that she is
why can't she
just leave me the hell alone--
(C) Copy written, 21 February, 2005, by Karla Dorman.
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|Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado
This is beyond bizarre; but it is still a very good write! I love that line, "She slaps them out of her pen". *Whap, whap, whap* LOL Terrific write, and have fun on your cruise; just be safe is all I ask! I shall miss you like crazy, but you deserve a break from me! LOL
(((HUGS))) and much love, your twin, Karen Lynn. :)
|Reviewed by Joel Raja Kumar J
|Not so sure you are alright, Karla. I am thinking the cruise ahs gotten into yore head. Poor Babe!!!
Enjoy your trip and bring back some memories to share with us. Moma will be pleased, may be:) :)
Love from India - Joel -
|Reviewed by Carole Mathys
|Excellent, powerful write Karla....
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|Wonderful and powerfully perfected!!
|Reviewed by Mr. Ed
|she slaps them out of my pen
Excellent way to get those babies down on paper - and only three more days!!!!!
|Reviewed by Barbara Terry
|Very good Karla. As you know I too was very misunderstood. May the Lord be with you, and at your side always. With much love, peace, & (((HUGS))), your very dear friend in Wisconsin, and sister in Christ our Lord,
Barbara Lynn Terry
"If I have to...Then I may as well be."
|Reviewed by jude forese
|an excellent poem revealing your frustration at being misunderstood ...|
|Reviewed by Phillip William Allen
|Absolutely perfectly penned|
|Reviewed by Ed Matlack
|Kind of a dark write for you, Karla...but still it seems to have a power that is kind of indescribable, but nonetheless still you...does that make any sense? ED|
|Reviewed by Lori Moore
|Great write. Sometimes, the ones that just come out are the best.|
|Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen
|This is a great write, hope you enjoy your cruise...
|Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
|So it's a booze cruise?
Karla I love what flows from your pen.
After a year at Aberlean, I know how sweet and caring Texan babes are..
|Reviewed by Nordette Adams
|You're going deeper into your muse, Karla. Let it flow.|
|Reviewed by Michelle Mills
|It's hard to run away from our muse-even if it's not the muse we asked for. Incredible piece Karla. Michelle|
|Reviewed by Faye Enno (Reader)
|Powerful piece! :)|
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Profound write that shows a deeply hidden event that when touched is like a raw nerve. You're doing right to expose it Karla! superb poem!
Love Eileen...(the T.warning is lifted;-) Still pouring rain though...
reminds me of when I lived in Illinois, and why I left;-)...
|Reviewed by Judy Lloyd (Reader)
|This is intense and something that believe it or not I have felt and one day when it is appropiate I can write it. But you sure hit one on the head.|
|Reviewed by Sue Hess
|wow, this is very intense...much anger here karla...i hope everything is okay|