by Kate Burnside
Monday, March 21, 2005
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Artist and Model make an appearance in prose! Have to get my head into serious study leave this week, so this may be my last post for a wee while... but I will be lookin in! :)) Kate xx
They sat together on the floor, backs pressed against the sofa, getting drunk on cheap South American red wine and munching Doritos. He braided her hair, painted her eyes cat-like, put his Stetson on her head and called her Boy George. Helpless with laughter, they raised their voices and sang out "Karma, karma, karma, karma, karma Cha-meee-leon".
But then, cutting her hair was a mistake; bubbles of mirth evaporated with each press of cold steel against the peachy flesh of her forehead. The plaits had been shaken out and the softly curling lengths of her hair fell to the floor like streams of moonlight.
The next day she was angular and edgy, tiredness circling her eyes and casting her whole face into shadow. He sketched her leaning heavily against the table; in silhouette against the frame of the window; and Plath-like, her long neck in a black polo sweater, arms folded across her chest. Hard, straight lines in monochrome. Distant and listless.
Her hair, still carpeting the floor, glowed warm in the evening light. He rescued a tiny lock and taped it to a very fine paintbrush. He dipped it into her favourite colour, carmine, and softly stoked it across her cheek.
Angles melted as they lay sinuous together, bathed in her waves. They journeyed to Rio, moving in overlapping circles and painting again a carnival canvas.
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|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|Wow! I am pretty well speechless, Kate. Thank you. Love and peace to you. Regis|
|Reviewed by Phillip William Allen
|Wow Kate, You woke me up this morn. Enjoyed|
|Reviewed by Dale Clark
|OH marvelous and a carnival canvas sounds
so delightfully enticing. Excellent! ;)
|Reviewed by A PAX
|I am so glad I went to your site today! I had no idea you were going to add to this series. Love these two. They are so universal. That hair cut is so symbolic. Changing a loved one, even with the gentlest of intentions can alter more than the obvious.
Brilliant Write Kate!! ty so very very much!
|Reviewed by M. B.
|Kate, how like you to pen an ultimately clever and unique masterpiece. Word choice is over the top, totally capturing
the pathos of your characters. Brilliant. Genius.
|Reviewed by jude forese
|superb fabric to the imagery of this prose ...
i expect you to get nothing less than an A+ ;)
|Reviewed by Kate Clifford
|I love the orginal thoughts within this write! Great descriptions.|
|Reviewed by Larry Rochelle
|Jumpin' Judah, woman. You nailed somethin' here with that carmine color that ain't never been seen nor felt before.|
|Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
|Ed beat me to it.
So do you really wanna hurt me, do yer really wanna make me cry.
Precious words i have spoken........
Least one person's gunna miss you, good ole Tigger.lol
A prose by any other name are words..
Nice one KarmaKhameleonKate....
|Reviewed by Felix Perry
|How we do regret the things we often do or say under the influence, you have taught a hard lesson in this one Kate. Good luck in your studies and I will look forward to your return.
|Reviewed by L. Figgins
|Circles and angles converge here in a great write!
*We WERE kind of on the same wavelength, Kate. I have been deeply immersed in math study in order to retest for higher placement, as it isn't my best subject!
|Reviewed by Sue Hess
|this is excellent, although many things done in the heat of passion are regrettable in the light of day...like impromptu haircuts :}|
|Reviewed by Judy Lloyd (Reader)
|Yes I would agree with Eileen on this interesting write.|
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Kate the Cezanne of word paintings! You have such a gifted mind, it seems to grasp whatever it chooses to and can do whatever it wants;-) Brilliant Kate! You'll be missed! Enjoy yourself!
|Reviewed by Edwin Larson
|This is truly an emotionally charged highly visual work that plays out in my mind as if it were captured on film. Brilliant, oh sensei of prose...
|Reviewed by Mr. Ed
|Every day was like a survival
He's her artist, not her rival
Sorry, Kate - couldn't resist; and you do 'prose' extremely well.
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
The painting, the artist, the subject come alive and blend into marvelous color through your stunning words--thank you for this masterwork. :)
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
I'll miss you not writing :(