out on our own
by Richard Christopher Criso Suarez
Friday, May 06, 2005
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a poem about love and humor.
and I painted this picture upon
just starting out with the paint brush.
I wrote this sometime this year....maybe someone
can get a kick out of it?
If You ever were to go away and leave me
alone, the way a parent is left when a child
I would cry , scream , yell and moan,
I'd bargain with GOD if He brought you
If you ever left to move out on your own!
If ever I left for another kind of life,
spend everything saved on a pretty
I would cry , scream , yell and I'd moan,
Until you forgave me and let me come
If you ever decided at some point in time,
another younger, stronger husband
would suit you just fine,
It would cause me no pain, I would
pay it no mind,
Calmly would I then you remind,
that I'd cry and scream, yell and moan,
Heck', I'd at the mouth willlingly foam;
Until you came to your senses and let back
home...because when we're together
we're out on our own.....and forever we
will make with each other our happy home!
copyright ã 2004-2005 rich criso suarez
all rirghts reserved
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|Reviewed by Zenith Elliott
|Your very talented, excellent painting and verse! Best wishes ~Z~|
|Reviewed by Sandie Angel
This painting reminds me of one of my own that I had painted with Microsoft Paint program. It's a joy to work with our creativities.
Your poems is also being very imaginative and is well-written of a very common situation that happen to many nowadays.
Wonderful job on both! Enjoyed them immensely.
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|Painting and verses complement one another well, Rich. Thank you for sharing. Welcome to the Den. Love and peace. Regis|
|Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper
|this was a pleasure to read Rich. My wife and I have been together about 20 years and this certainly fit my situation. Not a bad painting for beginning. I'm a painter also but don't do much of it lately. Writing is a bigger interest. Painting comes together the more you do it. Sooner or later you pick up your own style, just as with poeming. I seem to be a rhymer. When I try to break the rhyme, things seem to rhyme anyway. Sometimes I just like expressing without rhyming and I do just that. It's all fun to me. take care G|
|Reviewed by Mr. Ed
|A wonderful poetic ode to marriage, Rich - and Welcome to Author's Den.|
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|Unique but insightful read!!
Love the art...warm in color and filled with life!!!!
|Reviewed by Mary Quire
|This is a very unique and honest take on marrigage. Honesty is so hard to find these days, it's nice to know we can stay true to the craft.
|Reviewed by Tami Ryan
|Welcome to AuthorsDen, Ricky.
|Reviewed by Poetess of The Soul Sheila G
|Very nice Rich! YOU write very openly... I EnjOyed immensously :) Truly-Lady,Sheee|