Jack and Jill
by Sandra A. Mushi
Wednesday, July 20, 2005
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Jack and Jill, went up the hill,
Together they fetched water,
Jack fell down, and did he frown,
And Jill came tumbling after.
Down the hill, he remembered Bill,
With Jill he did fetch water,
Behind the trees, Bill got for free
Cuming sheíd scream like a mad-hatter.
Taught by Bill, how to fill,
Her skirts he lifted faster,
Oh the mound, he wanted to pound,
He laid her like does his master.
In the chill, butt out the twill,
Tonight he will be the spanker,
To lose his cherry, he wanted very,
Tonight he wonít be the wanker.
Went for the kill, with all his will,
As fast as he could caper,
In and out pump, he did his lump,
But he didnít use a rubber.
ĎAlas,í screamed Jill, ĎIím not on the pillí
Oh Gawd I canít be a father
If quick I hide, time I will bide
Until she becomes a mother.
To hide from Bill, he forgets until,
But who will fetch the water,
The sheep I mind, the crops I find,
The evidence to hide until after.
Looking gill, must hide from Bill,
Afraid to be the crapper,
Home he dashed, in vinegar he washed,
And stuffed it in a brown paper.
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|Reviewed by Ingrid Khola (Reader)
|Hahaha u r bad! wrong! That's what we say in SA when someone is wickedly awesome! Laughed out loud and I'm pretending to be soooo busy! Now caught out!!|
|Reviewed by firstname.lastname@example.org Bennett
|This was unn, seductive and real cute my friend as always. i see you like this realhot poetry which is good. That means you are not afraid of your feelings at all and that is a plus in my book.|
|Reviewed by sany jackson (Reader)
|Reviewed by Mark Rockeymoore
|you took some time with this one right here! love the language, true to the original verse, and very creative and erotic indeed! you have a way with imagery and such a comical view of life, and you express it so very well!|
|Reviewed by Amira van Kerk
|A cute write.
I have to read more of your work. Like it alot.
|Reviewed by Katy Walsvik
|Madam, you stick it out there, no blushing allowed, and to hell with flowery words or mushy inuendos... SIGN ME UP FOR YOUR FANCLUB! (grin) You've got guts... you also have a snappy knack for great rhythm and rhyme. Ahhhhhh... what a combination. You take the cake! Wheeeeeeeeee katy xox|
|Reviewed by Tracey L. O' Very (Reader)
|This is really cute. I love it. (c :)
Thanks It's Great!!xoox
|Reviewed by Damaa --
|Reviewed by Sandie Angel
|A fun read. Well-done!
Sandie May Angel a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
|Reviewed by June Thompson
|hell of a write... not what I was expecting after getting your reviews *smile.... thanks so much|
|Reviewed by Lori Moore
|Thanks for the laugh!|
|Reviewed by William Bonilla
William .....Peace & Love
|Reviewed by Richard Christopher Suarez
nice and masty.....ooooh you're so nasty'.
reminds me of that song by the sal-soul ochestra.
Rich Criso Suarez
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|Thanking you for sharing your humor, Sandie. Appreciated. Love and peace to you. Regis|
|Reviewed by Ronald Hull
|A raging parady--indeed!
|Reviewed by ~Indigo~ Elga
|Sandie.... you ARE wicked, and what a sense of humour, this is just too funny, you and Tinka... I'll say no more hehehehe.
A very good write enjoyed and thanks for the laughter.
p.s. yes, what Tinka wrote is in Afrikaans ;) do you understand it?
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
Laffing too hard toproperly review--classic!
(((HUGS))) and love, Kalr.a :)
|Reviewed by G M
|Very clever send up...that's a hard thing to do. Well done! MG|
|Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK
|Wild N Off The Wall Up The Hill Write!
|Reviewed by Roger Ochs
|"Jack and Jill went up the hill
Each with a dollar and a quarter.
Jill came back with $2.50
"Cause she didn't go up for water."
In my youth we recited it that way. I like yours better.
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|And I thought I was naughty...you beat me to that...now...hehehehehe!!
|Reviewed by Mr. Ed
|Quite a unique take on this old classic, Sandra!|
|Reviewed by Mary Quire
|LOL I love the remake much better.|
|Reviewed by Mohit Misra
|ha ha ha ha ah
lovely sense of humour
|Reviewed by Poetess of The Soul Sheila G
|That was cute- catchy and Thank you Sandra! : ) I will never forget this version of Jack and Jill... hee,hee WARmly,Sheee I find myself wanting to do my bunny poem, not sure yet....|
|Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
|The only unique remake I've read. Thanks for the laugh...|
|Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson
|hee,hee, this is surely different...
Hope life is being go0d to you Sandra...
|Reviewed by Denise Edwards
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Some sense of humor,who wouldn't laugh at
this horny toon, very funny Sandie!;-)
|Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)
|Hahaha!!! Reminds me of the one I did about Betty Boop! Loved it.|