Earth, Wind , Water and fire
by Richard Christopher Criso Suarez
Saturday, September 03, 2005
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Really curious about your reviews on this one. I wrote rather quickly , but
I am trying to see if there is any real significant difference in these/. |
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I wrote this one in a snapp , but I am curious to see how these quickies compare with all the others that take me a while and inspiration , to produce.
I painted this one and I know the pictures not all that and I am not too sure if goes with this poem , but I just felt like adding it in here.
Of course you Authors can help with your reviews.
I am out on a limb dancing around in the wind
searching for a place to set my roots in
a new space to begin
I am dancing over the waves
sleeping all day in the darkest caves
into and through all these water ways
I am dancing in the flames of blue and red
I spark the fire when it’s dead
full of desire burning in from both ends
I am dancing in a spin across the dirt
the darkest richest soil of earth
I am well rounded and lavishly produce all worth
the earth spins and the wind blows
and the water moves as the fire grows
these precious elements
and on us it is bestowed !
All great stuff
what do you know!?
The End
copyright © 2005 Rich Criso Suarez
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| Reviewed by Tina Clark |
9/6/2005 |
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I LOVED the whole of it Rich! "I am well rounded and lavishly produce all worth" YES, you are my friend! this is really nice and if you can come out with this in just a second then keep them coming! :)
Huggles
Tina |
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| Reviewed by Kate Burnside |
9/5/2005 |
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| I love both, Rich... in the painting, I especially like the light on the mountains - and the puzzling perspectives achieved which surprise and delight. It very much suits, I think, the spontanaeity of the poetry, and the poem that very much "writes itself" is, I believe, as valid as the finely tuned and deeply-etched and thought-out work that takes its time to come. There is perhaps a "slow-driving" with a more sustained piece, that strives towards a particular message or POV; whereas, like the art here, the "quickie" catches a breeze that can twist and turn with every re-reading. Like you, I am at a loss to compare and weigh each type one against the other. I am told some of my best stuff is "the done-in-a-moment" type, whereas some of MY "darlings" are more the blood, sweat and tears ones. All are art and, as such, are probably impossible to compare like for like... except I like for like both of these offerings on this page today! :)) TY and Bless you, Kate xx |
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| Reviewed by Kathleen Herrick |
9/4/2005 |
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| This flows nicely and scans easily also. I like a poem that takes me on a ride of natural beauty from which I gain delight! Not bad, and perhaps, if you wish, you may someday turn this into a sonnet or someting like that? I do this at times and sometimes it works with my muse and sometimes not. Nice work! :) |
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
9/3/2005 |
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Earth, Wind , Water and fire arer the four most powerful elements of nature!!
Your quick poems are realy good...and I can relate with them well..because they are unigue and straight from the heart!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by Sage Sweetwater |
9/3/2005 |
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Spontaneity is absolutely necessary and a valuable built-in tool in a writer's cedar wood chest filled with chutzpah! I understand this poetry because I am a practitioner of Wicca which honors the five elements; air, earth, fire, water, and spirit. Water is the oldest form of transportation. Rich, let it carry you in creative currents to your zenith and fan your personal style literary fire with the zephyr of your psyche nourishing good literary soil. I think this worked well! I REALLY DO.
Sage |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
9/3/2005 |
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I enjoyed this poem Rich, but perhaps I misunderstand, to me it says that The elements may be destructive , but they are also a blessing, gifts that we can appreciate, even though at times they turn on us;-)
When we write quickly we may make it harder for some to grasp, but I agree with Sherry too, we must write to please oursleves too, and hope others will enjoy it, but we all have differnt perspectives so we have to go with our own and not rely on others. What Thomas said is also helpful. etw |
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| Reviewed by Thomas Lanechanger |
9/3/2005 |
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| Poet, one can only get the unique “feel” from what they themselves have experienced in their lives. A dear friend once told me that what you write is between you and the Creator. However, I, also believe, it’s a Poet’s obligation to ensure that what one writes, one must be comfortable enough to post it upon the pages of life in an conscience effort to help educate those who are fortunate enough to read them. You have fulfilled that sacred quest with this striking plea. I also believe that this piece slowly drifted away from the main body due to the large gap between lines 12 & 13. Overall, I did enjoy the read. Always remember, we are only blips on the radar screen as we traverse through the elements on this spinning blue dot, we call, “Earth.” Thank you for sharing. Take good care and be well. |
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| Reviewed by Sherry Heim |
9/3/2005 |
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These are both fine offerings, Rich. Only you can decide what poems you are the most comfortable with and which ones you are proud to have written. Our comments are made from our perspective and may not reflect your ideas at all. Always write for yourself and from your heart and you can never go wrong. I snet you a note about the music, Rich.
Take care,
Sherry |
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| Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader) |
9/3/2005 |
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| Earth, Wind, Water amd fire! Sounds like a rock group. LOL Wasn't too sure where this poem was headed. At first I thought it was Katrina, but I guess it isn't. I have to admit it is a little hazy. The words you use are very descriptive, but I had a lot of trouble following it. Frgive me, my mind is still whirling around, I guess it'll take a few more days to get the storm out of my system. |
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