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Stalked (A Tricouplet)
by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
Monday, January 16, 2006
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Inspired by Jerry Bolton's creative genius.

STALKED (A Tricouplet) *
~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~
embers announce a newborn as
fire begat fire:
on white-hot sheets of flame, a beast
with yellow eyes
twists on its umbilical cord
in strengthening winds.

it learns to graze;
the fields, ablaze.

the monster's breath sears the sun
which turns blood-red;
smoke chugs from its nostrils; i taste
its presence
bitter on my tongue, sharp like glass
deep in my lungs,

igniting fear
as it draws near.

this is MY disaster, the
ongoing drought,
because i prayed the rain away.
it's my fault.
the devil parting burning grass
searches for me

as its next snack ...
must watch my back.

(c) 2006, Karla Dorman.
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* Hey, I only get one hour on the computer; besides, I ran out of words. Thanks, Jerry, for the inspiration! Hope I did it proud. :)

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Reviewed by Safi Abdi	1/19/2006

Fantastic write! Safi




Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen	1/17/2006

Excellent write as always Karla GOd Bless Michelle!




Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado	1/17/2006

Karla: one word, BRAVA!! :)




Reviewed by Sage Sweetwater	1/16/2006

Well done, Karla! Takes like a match to a light ... torched this one, baby! Sending some rain your way. Get out your rain barrel and catch it to wash your hair! Sage




Reviewed by Carole Mathys	1/16/2006

Fabulous write Karla! Love and peace to you Carole




Reviewed by Sherry Heim	1/16/2006

You have captured the rage and terror of fire in this beautiful poem, Karla. I saw clouds crossing over Texas on the radar today and I wondered if any rain had fallen. I am guessing no, by what you have written here. We were supposed to get snow and rain from the clouds today but Yansa, the Goddess of wind, inhaled the clouds and blew them on toward Texas. Take care, Sherry




Reviewed by Tinka Boukes	1/16/2006

Stunning work Karla!! Love Tinka




Reviewed by Felix Perry	1/16/2006

You did super well, this is an inspired work and one to be very proud of, well done. Felix




Reviewed by Paul Williams	1/16/2006

Stunning piece Karla, your pen done Jerry proud girl. Paul;-)




Reviewed by Kate Burnside	1/16/2006

I think this is truly one of your best, Karla! So spot-on atmospheric it summons all the appropriate emotions into a vivid fury... reminds me of the nightmares I had when I was sick with a perpetual high fever, such that I had the rigours; there was always someone out to get me and was burning me to the ground! Hellish or what?? Excellent diction and form... irrespective of time and word pressures! :)) TY Kate xx AND for all your love and prayers for my Mum... she is hangin in there! xx




Reviewed by Dee C.	1/16/2006

Awesome job!!! D:)




Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader)	1/16/2006

I got ya, I like it, very much. Thanks for trying it out, even if it is a short. I know a lot of folks don't like long poems, but I do. thanks again. Will send you something in the morning.




Reviewed by Phillip William Allen	1/16/2006

An amazing pen Karla.




Reviewed by Birgit and Roger Pratcher	1/16/2006

Great Karla, you are amazing, (((Hugs))) Birgit and Roger




Reviewed by Kate Clifford	1/16/2006

You did more then make it proud you brought it to life! Fantastic write. I could feel the heat. It's not your fault; nature does as nature pleases.




*Reviewed by Joseph OneLight®*	1/16/2006

I think you did Jerry's form proud, Karla. Love & Light, Joseph




Reviewed by E T Waldron	1/16/2006

Karla with this write you have just proved beyond a doubt , your worth as a poet. I hope you will remember this one every time you begin to doubt yourself. Hang it on your fridge! Dynamic poetry with vibrant visuals that stoke the imagination. I like the tricouplet, fantastic! Eileen




Reviewed by alejapoet@aol.com Bennett	1/16/2006

This was your own words as nobody else can write as you. We all are dierent but what matters is that you are writing and it is going all around the world no matter what you write is a blessing for all us to read. God Bless.




Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson	1/16/2006

You did it fantastic..... x0x0x0x Your friend......Ron

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