by R. Steven Reynolds
Friday, March 17, 2006
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I am really hoping for some feedback about this.
There he is in repose on his bier
Now it is the time for all to fear
To live he had to spread his seed
In places where there was a need
Requiring blood, sweat and tears
Without that he just disappears
But too few were willing to give
To give in order for him to live
Selfishly saying never me not I
The Iís persisted so itís now bye
Too soon the lamenting will begin
Because we will all be slaves again
Freedom isn't and was never free
Try thinking of us or we not I or me
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|Reviewed by Sherry Heim
|The Soldier gives unselfishly for the greater good of humanity, certainly a soldier who believes in freedom. There is a human side to war (odd as that may sound) and a political side. The soldier follows the orders of the political side because he/she believes in the human side. Freedom should be the birthright of all mankind, sadly that is not the case. You are right, "Freedom is never free" and the price paid for it is greater than anything else we have ever known. The red stripes in our flag symbolize the rivers of blood that have been shed by those who so believed in freedom that they gave their all in defense of it. Thank you for this poem, Steven, I somehow feel that Erin may have misunderstood the direction you were taking with this, or perhaps I am the one who did not understand your intentions. I agree that too many want the benefits that only a few are willing to stand up for.
|Reviewed by Hanley Harding
Though Erin is my friend, I disagree with her comments on "too few were willing". It is WILL which makes the real difference betwen freedom and slavery. This piece might could use a bit of grammatical "polish", but rings very true for such as me and those I knew...
|Reviewed by Erin Kelly-Moen
|To me, R. Steven, you started out strong, then became peavish, as in 'too few were willing', maybe, 'too few were able' would sound more reality-given, since faith, compromised by the indivdual thoughts of six billion people, is, and especially was, perspectively driven. You don't want to ram religion down anyone's throat, it is conscriptive to freedom...
I enjoyed viewing your bio picture, I had wondered of the 'who' behind the mind. I feel there are depths to be gathered, considered and assimilated and written of, from your life, because, I felt comfort from your image, Steven...
Erin Elizabeth Kelly-Moen
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|So very true.....freedom does not come for free..too much greed and self indulgence!!
Blood I wil give to any person if I could but am not allowed
to..because I am suffering that "low blood pressure" thingy!!