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| Reviewed by CJ Heck |
10/13/2006 |
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This is truly exceptional, William. Even as bitter as the harlot was, she was still better in God's eyes than his first idea would have been ... yikes.
Very good poem and I enjoyed!
Love,
CJ |
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
10/10/2006 |
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Great lesson within this one William...to count to ten before you give in to anything!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by William Bonilla |
10/10/2006 |
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Hi A Pax
Everyone reads a poem their own way
and make conclusions Of their won
some read between the lines
And misunderstand the writer's scenario
To the posted Piece
Here I am writing about a shepherd
Who is about to sin Before The Lord
For the Lord sees all.
The Angel was send to right the wrong
My expression of the slithering Harlot
Was not meant to be a snake
But the sensuous movements of her hips and arms
Like a belley dancer.
The Figs don't reprenst anything
But the fruit its meant to be,
also mentioned in the Bible
When Adam & Eve Covered themselves
With fig leaves, Because they comitted
transgressio9n
The last verse
About the Harlot's bitterness is found in
Bible under Provers.
Thank you A Pax
For reading and commenting on my posted
disturbed Piece.
Love & Peace to all
William
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| Reviewed by A PAX |
10/10/2006 |
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Oh William
I am so confused and lost about this one......
Is this about beastiality (sp?)
A lamb, a snake......then the tree?
This is sort of disturbing carnal.......and I am guessing thats the intent of the write....
do figs represent something........
Or was this guy just super lonely.......
this is a write that makes one uncomfortable, yet it gets one thinking..........
hmmm??
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| Reviewed by Steve Ralph |
10/10/2006 |
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It never ceases to amaze me what lust, greed and envy can make a person do, excellent write. thank you for sharing it.
Steve |
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| Reviewed by SaPAth AnANd |
10/10/2006 |
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Temptation and lust may lead us to bad places and that alone can ruin our happiness,Great write William!
Bom Bhole!
Roshan |
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| Reviewed by Ed Matlack |
10/9/2006 |
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| I know whats under my triple X fig leaf...;) Ed |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
10/9/2006 |
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You lay it on the line here. Can we overcome our desires or must we give in to them even when we know its not worth it.Evil is always rotten...Excellent bold work William!
Eileen |
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| Reviewed by Susan de Vegter |
10/9/2006 |
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Oh wow! This is incredible and full of the road traveled in many ways. Evil comes in pretty situations at times and man faces is own crossroads.The tests in life isn't always hard but wiser than we give the choices we have when temptation is all dressed out abd smiling. Your pen should cause a lot of soul searching for a lot of readers.
Susan. |
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| Reviewed by Ronald Hull |
10/9/2006 |
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Sounds like a biblical fable unfolding.
Ron |
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| Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader) |
10/9/2006 |
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One bloke in Africa has been made to marry his sheep after he was caught in the act. I guess that was the only bar at the wedding.
Yup betta off doing a boys thing till yer with your beloved... |
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| Reviewed by Susan Sonnen |
10/9/2006 |
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an adult Aesop-type fable...very, very good work!
Susan |
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| Reviewed by Rusty Daily |
10/9/2006 |
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Seems a fitting parable for the danger of giving into our lusts.
Rusty |
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| Reviewed by J M |
10/9/2006 |
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This held a good lesson William.....Crafted well.
Thank you for sharing this one.
peace and Light
Joselyn |
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