A Clock, The Essence of Life...
by Chris & G. Reed
Sunday, November 12, 2006
Rated "PG" by the Author.
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A poem about how life is so short to leave behind a legacy for others to remember and questioning what happens after your death...
My life's running out,
To the sound of this clock,
I can't go on wasting,
My time here everyday,
Life tends to keep on whithering,
A terrifying thought that I encounter,
What comes after this earth?
Is my body the only remain?
Or could there be rebirth?
I can't accept an answer,
The clock catches my eye,
Time keeps on flying by,
Do i really have a purpose?
Does some so called "God" have my life planned?
I don't believe he's real,
Why would he let so many lives turn out so bad,
It just doesn't make any sense,
These pieces won't fit any better,
This puzzle of existence,
Will never be fit together,
A name is the final answer,
The only way to be remembered,
Our goal is to leave a legacy behind,
Before vanishing from humankind,
But one obstacle lies ahead,
Time is the essence of life,
Before you know it,
You'll be dead...
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|Reviewed by Linda Hill
Thank you for inviting me to read this poetry. You have talent, Chris. Keep writing. I started writing when I was in grade school, and I'm happiest when I am writing. Keep the pen in your hand, Chris. You are great.
|Reviewed by Gwendolyn Thomas Gath
"A Clock, The Essence of Life"
Enjoyed the flow, the read, and the topic raised in this piece.
A poet's heart will always have them on the right track this in self is what I would say the Creator has put for you to find and discover. As a writer writes from their heart so shall the words then exist, without a question, without a doubt within it self is the center of creation, therefore the true Creator may be found, in my belief!
There are no doubts in my mind that through your work you will discover all that you need to know, and also you will discover love and another to share this true love within your heart!
Hugzzzzzand blessings to you, keep on doing it and do not stop!!
Continued peace in you heart, soul, and mind Chris. As a poet/writer we love you, don't forget.
From the Heart of an Artist Quiet Storm
ps. there are many words here on the AD site to inspire, encourage, and continue to help you grow and prosper into even more than you were yesterday!
|Reviewed by CJ Heck
|This is very good, Chris. In my humble opinion, I do think you're on the right track -- your observations are good, and the imagery you've used is excellent. Keep doing what you're doing, my friend. At 16, you're already an accomplished poet.
My very warmest regards,
|Reviewed by Joyce Bowling
|Thank you for sending me a message to read your poem...I apologize for not reading more...but as your poem time during the day runs out before we know it. I enjoy reading your poetry...in my opinion your on the right track...true poetry is inspired from events sad or happy, questions we may have about life or situations, memories pleasant or otherwise, but nevertheless something that inspires us. I feel that if a poem is written from inspiration then, the poet is on the right track. After all poetry is about expression. I love how you compared the clock to life...your poem reads and flows smoothly and is a topic that is appealing and makes the reader stop and think. Life is hard to understand...I see and sense much pain through your poetry, writing is a great therapy. You are right about the Legacy, my grandfather always said without a good name we were a nobody, that a good name in one's community meant more than fame. Keep writing my friend, I really enjoyed your write...you've given me much to think about today, good poetry does that. I do believe in God, I too have had much heartache my friend...much like you at an early age, but when I gave my whole heart to Him...life just seemed to make sense and the pieces of the puzzle came together. It's not been a bed of roses, I still have trials and troubles just as everyone does, but with God the storms of life are easier to withstand. Great write....I will try to visit your den more often. Stay in touch.
Blessings from Kentucky,
|Reviewed by Sandie Angel
Thanks so much for inviting me to read this! Free form poetry are just that - free form; but it should be expressive enough to make a statement of a fact, a fantasy, a feeling - all of these make a good poem.
Free form poetry, whether it is a hit or a miss, depends upon the readers' reaction to the poem when it is being read.
A free form poem should be expressive in feelings about love, or angers, or happiness, or sadness, and the readers should be able to feel for the author while reading the poem. A free form poem should also make a statement of a fact to cause the readers to agree in unison; or even cause the readers to disagree and cause a debate; then the poem is a successful poem, because it has caught the readers' attention.
This poem makes a statement about life itself by using the clock to express the passing of time, and to express the feelings of the authors how he views about time and the passing of lives.
It makes the readers think, and agree with you. Therefore, in my opinion, this poem is sucessful.
Please note that all the above is just my own humble opinions. I'm so happy you are writing and sharing your work with us.
Please keep up the wonderful work!
Sandie Angel :o)
|Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
|The lesson is always to make each moment count. Each moment has value to those left behind as well as self.
This is a good read, Chris. You set the rhythm very well with the repeating of the "tick-toc."