Undone (Inspired by E.T. Waldron's 'Mystery Man')
by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
Friday, December 21, 2007
Rated "G" by the Author.
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Now look what you made me do! LOL
... You know you undo me when you
strip me naked, expose all to your
caress - I melt like butter under the
lightning of your touch - there - there -
and there. Your heat fills me until
there is nothing left but the shuddering
climax ... the soothing rain quenches
and settles the universe back in place.
(c) 2007, Karla Dorman (12/21)
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|Reviewed by Felix Perry
|Wow Karla...this is hot, passionate writing at its best and you sure nailed it as a subject. Love this one best of all of yours to date.
|Reviewed by Amber Moonstone
Well, you certainly know how to have a passionate time! Nice sensual poem..
Peace, love, and light,
|Reviewed by Rebecca Lerwill
|...ditto..... WOW * 3
|Reviewed by Walt Hardester
|And more Wow's from me|
|Reviewed by Mr. Ed
|Wow, Wow, and Wow.|
|Reviewed by Susan de Vegter
|Your pen is very deserving of a beautiful, technicolored rainbow.
Love and blessings!
|Reviewed by Karen Palumbo
|And so goeth the next thunder storm quenching the land. One heck of a write filled with beauty....
|Reviewed by jude forese
|mission accomplished! ;)|
|Reviewed by Christine Alwin
|wow Karla,,,this is some hot thunder,,,,,,,:)|
|Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen
|This is great Karla thank you for sharing
|Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado
|Excellent response to Eileen's challenge; glad you were inspired by such a gifted poetess; she inspires a lot of people here, including me. Very well penned; brava!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your twin, Karen Lynn. :D
|Reviewed by stan nassano
|what can I say but Rock on,
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|Oh girl you truly got INSPIRED with a flash!!
Gotta love it!!
|Reviewed by D Johnson
|I had to read Eileen's poem first, glad I did, good on you for your depth of perception.
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|hahaha good to know my metaphor got through to you. You did good Karla,causing the storm to split asunder,and reveal its thunder;-)