by Edwin Larson
Friday, April 11, 2008
Rated "G" by the Author.
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A silly bit of nonsense :)
The faulty flipper on the Fangadoodle froze
causing a contraptional clunk,
not the common clink,
but a crystal clear controversial clunk...
and then a clank and clatter
All drew still upon the surface
serene sat the sun o’er the sea
The misaligned mechanical monstrosity
In a breath
with sight with touch in soul
All did partake of the silence
if just for one brief moment
but once the faulty flipper was fixed
and the Fangadoodle fully fueled
the winding whirring would begin again
And most of All
did forget that moment of clarity
as dummies sprang forth from passenger seats
in crowded carpool lanes providing more
far-flung faulty parts for the Fangadoodle
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|Reviewed by Roger Ochs
|Rich humor with a bit of a lilt. Bravo.|
|Reviewed by Charlie
|I love this tongue-in-cheek, double tongue-twisted thing. Awesome!! --Charlie|
|Reviewed by ~ Chanti
|In the flavour of Dr. Seuss with the flair of Roald Dahl. What a great imagination you have.
I wouldn't call this a 'silly bit of nonsense' since it was birthed in your brilliant mind.
|Reviewed by Karen Palumbo
|Interesting and full of wonderful flavors to savor, like those mechanical monsters at shows that devour everything in sight...
Be always safe,
|Reviewed by Felix Perry
|Interesting wit my friend and I love the images you have written here, kept thinking of the car in Chitty Chitty Bang Bang.