Heart Hit
by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper
Thursday, May 08, 2008
Rated "G" by the Author.
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A fictional romantic poem expressing love wrote in the singular. |
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Your love fell on me like
a ton of bricks,
I am a man of vanity,
I have no tricks.
I would never hire a magician,
but instead I think I need
a heart physician.
After your love blast,
my heart is beating too fast.
I refuse to go to
the doctor you know,
because I really don't
want this heart to slow.
I'm a sucker for your love kiss,
I want to keep my honey bliss.
As long as this love remain,
it will keep my world sane.
I reach out to your lovely hand,
freeze up the hour glass sand,
enjoying this feeling so grand.
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| Reviewed by Lois Christensen |
5/11/2008 |
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| Good loving write and good tribute to love. Wish I had my love back in my life, but he is with me in spirit. Good writing and hit my heart too. |
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| Reviewed by Bernice Angoh |
5/8/2008 |
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| you just keep getting better!!!! This is loaded with sweets and lots of sugar...from the first line to the very last, and your art work is beautiful too, I remember you saying they were yours? |
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| Reviewed by Mr. Ed |
5/8/2008 |
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Your love fell on me like
a ton of bricks
Amazing how that happens some times! |
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| Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader) |
5/8/2008 |
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Oh my,beautiful writing from such a loving and sweet sweet man...enjoy your day and be safe ...Hugssssss
Love,
Chanti Lace xoxo |
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| Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado |
5/8/2008 |
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Very sweet write, Gem; very well penned! BRAVO!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D |
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| Reviewed by Liana Margiva |
5/8/2008 |
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| Sweet words!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva |
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| Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan |
5/8/2008 |
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| wonderfully expressed! |
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