Name Your Flavor
If we are very, very lucky, one day
heaven floats us a big grass and moss
cushion frilled by leaves from, say,
a willow oak that knows its stuff.
Tree whose rings go back and back
and like-minded giants whose pleasure
it is to shade as we thrill at air
tastes like cherry-ade with a teensy
spritz of champaign. Breeze riffles
leaves and hair. Add little ones to
stir. Here a toddler, there a biiiiiig
boy and a biiiiiig girl. What fun
it is to blow bubbles at a pink plastic
table teeters caterwampus. Don't miss
the tot balancing one tiny, sandaled foot
at a time. Dimple-starred grin going
to slay you. Big people bustle about,
chatting up catsup, mustard, pickles,
chips. Sorry 'bout the sauce, someone
mouths.. Mmm, smell charring dogs,
Smartdogs, burgers. Make room, okay?
No one hurts, no one feels sad. Rumbles
are belly laughs adding exclamation points
to giggles, chortles, and chuckles. Little'n's
outbursts quiet in seconds, cause forgotten.
Oh, and we have pie! Chocolate, lemon,
some kinda nut. Layer cake for good
measure!. What is sweet, cold, and calls
for extra scoops? Somebody please run
and get bowls. More spoons be good.
If we are very, very lucky, one day.
(c) Phyllis Jean Green, Memorial Day, 2008
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|Reviewed by Kate Burnside
|Delightful, Pea, and I wish the weather would play the game these days! Nothing like a good al fresco to bind hearts and minds together for the sole purpose of PLAY! Big'uns and littley alike. You have captured the frisson of excitement and expectation, the chaos and the pleasure of coming together en famille in this most relaxed and ambient of ways. This touches every one of the senses and makes me long for red gingham and wicker picnic baskets... but not the wasps! :)) Beautiful and effective descriptions here. TY Kate xx|
|Reviewed by John Leko
|...such beautiful memory you have given...as if a large book of photographs had been opened...penned details beneath each...and suddenly becomes film...moving with words...voices. A fine appetite you have stirred up in this write.
|Reviewed by Joyce Bowling
|Mmm, what a flavorfull write my friend, loved it...got me hungry!
|Reviewed by Paul Berube
I'll have Rum Raisin. A smoothe, cool and relaxing write. Peace, Love and Blessings Always, Paul.
|Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper
|flavor well painted my dear, kind of made me hungry ;-)|
|Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson
|Wonderful day dreamin.
I'm hungry for pie now..
|Reviewed by Karen Palumbo
|Wow, that is one beautiful tree to gather under! Pistachio or Butter Pecan please, two scoops! Wonderful write of sharing, giving, enjoying each other....
Be always safe,
|Reviewed by Rose Rideout
|Very pleasant write Phyllis, thank you for sharing.
Newfie Hugs, Rose
|Reviewed by Elizabeth Price
|What an awesome daydream. I loved going back with the tree rings for a taste of heaven. Excellent write. Liz|
|Reviewed by Felix Perry
|What a pleasant image you paint on the canvas of summer...I can't wait till it warms up enough to start having picnics again.
|Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan
|such wonderful images of family--absolutely beautiful|
|Reviewed by Gene Williamson
|This takes me back to the family get-togethers on Sunday
afternoons at Aunt Ella's. She lived in the country, off
the main road, down a winding lane, deep in the woods. We
refreshed with cool well water and gorged on all that tasty
food prepared and served with love. My flavor: Apple.
Phyllis, thank you for this. - Gene.
|Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU
Lovely depicting... wonderful picture... wise message.
I salute You, Poet.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
|Reviewed by Lois Christensen
|Sounds just like the gathering we used to have. One time I made homemade Chocolate ice cream right on the spot at the park, had electric in the pavillion. Everything was good. My aunt's choc cake and her baked beans were the best, and she would not let anyone tell her any different. She did not brag, but you could not say someone else's was better. Happy Memories you brought back with this.|
|Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader)
|Oh my,very beautiful indeed...have a wonderful and safe day...Hugsss|
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
|Ohhhhhhhh, (((Pea))), this one is delicious! You set the atmosphere and make us glory in scenery that unfolds pleasantly, stimulating all the senses - my flavor? Hmmmmmmmmm - strawberry fields, forever! LOL Well done. Love your mind, YOU most of all -
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
|Reviewed by Bonnie May
|These flavors sound delicious as is this poem. Great pen, Love, Bonnie|