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Ultimately
by Dawn Anderson
Thursday, May 29, 2008
Rated "G" by the Author.
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A thought…

 

Playing itself

out in his mind…

Like a small ball

continually bounced

back and forth.

 

He tired to erase it…

 

But it seemed the harder he tried,

the stronger the thought became.

 

It had exhausted him for days…

Rendered him

sleepless…Left him

with a an ache

in the pit of his stomach.

 

Why was it that this

one action

was so difficult?

He was a grown man…

Had seen and done much

during the course of

his life.

 

He swallowed hard…

 

Took a deep breath…

 

Now

making a conscious effort

to allow himself to

contemplate the thought…

 

To ponder the words…

 

To slowly say them

out loud…

 

“I’m sorry.”

 

He shuddered at the sound of his own voice

as the words escaped from his lips…

Ultimately deciding his pride

far more important.

 

 

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Reviewed by Sukky Fagbohun 7/29/2008
You have a powerful way of penning your points. I cannot but feel the agony of this fellow. Pride is a crazy demon that denies people the peace that lurks behind the gentle little phrase,
"I'm sorry."
Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen 6/7/2008
Powerful write, sometimes sorry is hard to say not only for men but for women as well
God Bless
Michelle~
Reviewed by Carin Spirit 6/3/2008
Dawn your words are so true for some people, if he only understood that taking responsibility of one's own actions, words included, will guide him to a freedom beyond his imagination. Thank you for putting these words so eloquently. Warmth and Love, Carin'
Reviewed by Lavendar Jazz 6/3/2008
You have a wonderful gift of painting pictures with words...I really enjoyed this one.
Reviewed by Axilea MU 6/3/2008
You look at what happens inside a man. Some would sacrifice anything to their pride.

Axilea
Reviewed by Dale Clark 6/2/2008
Pride always weighs one down
and sorry is the best thing to say
I'm sorry to say lol ;)
Reviewed by Elizabeth Price 6/1/2008
I love this one. My vision was of a man who lives at 1600 Pennsylvania avenue. I only wish I believed he was struggling with saying those 2 words. Excellent write. Liz
Reviewed by Art Sun 6/1/2008
Getting past pride can be a difficult emotion and yet it is so easy to let pride go...

Your poem shows your ability to write those emotions from the other side...nice work Dawn...


Art Sun...
Reviewed by John Leko 5/31/2008
...you have said much Dawn...in this well written and my perhaps...most favorite write of yours.
excellent...
John
Reviewed by Shedding Light 5/31/2008
Very beautiful work.

Harold M. Nash
Reviewed by William Bonilla 5/31/2008
A fantastic write Dawn
most enjoyable reading
Love & Peace be with you

William
Reviewed by Kate Burnside 5/31/2008
Wonderfully crystalised thought process here, Dawn. The ache on both sides palpable. And how is it, even if those strangulated words DO manage to escape, it sounds sometimes as if it is the supremest effort of self-sacrifice or self-pity, making you feel even worse for provoking it??!! :)) Sometimes the agony just isn't worth it. Such power in three little words... always three... one way or the other! TY Kate xx
Reviewed by E T Waldron 5/31/2008
Wow! This is a gem, Dawn! Brilliant!...ET
Reviewed by Mary Lacey, Desertrat 5/30/2008
Why is it so hard to say those two little words?


Mary
Reviewed by Christine Alwin 5/30/2008
Just think how life could be different if one did now waste the minutes away stewing in pride; Words can make or break one. Awesome poem.
Christine
Reviewed by Cryssa C 5/30/2008
Love it!! Sad that saying those words can ultimately be so incredibly difficult!

Cryssa
Reviewed by L Hippler 5/30/2008
I really liked this one, Dawn. I think it's one of my favorites.
Larry
Reviewed by Felix Perry 5/30/2008
It is often hard to admit that we are human and make mistakes, whether small ones like forgettting to close a door or major ones like forgetting an anniversary. Loving though means learning and if we learn from the mistakes then love is growing.
hugs
Fee
Reviewed by Bernice Lakota 5/30/2008
Beautiful and powerful! Yes, the many who have fallen just because that one phrase "I'm sorry" was to heavy for their tongues....
Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner 5/30/2008
Powerfully penned - my new favorite of yours - and that image is beautiful - coming out of the fog - into the light -

(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
Reviewed by J. Allen Wilson 5/30/2008
This is beautifully drawn out to such a pointed conclusion...excellent writing...

Allen

PS: "It might be of little consolation...but you are in my prayers"

Always of this there is hope...prayer is the foundation of my hope...Thank you so much.

Allen
Reviewed by Gene Williamson 5/30/2008
Dawn, this is another of your poems to add to my collection
of wonderful poems. Beautifully written. Especially that
first stanza.

You might remember that great scene in A Thousand Clouds where
Jason Robards is standing on a corner repeating over and over
the litany, I'm sorry, I'm sorry, etc. Then he says to Barbara
Harris, something like, "You'd be surprised how many passersby
forgave me." Sort of takes the meaning our of "I'm sorry."

Gene.
Reviewed by Mr. Ed 5/30/2008
Im sorry.

Two tiny words that are so hard for so many of us to ever utter.
Reviewed by Gianetta Ellis 5/30/2008
The choices we make sculpt who we become - maybe tomorrow his pride will stand aside allowing his humility to take center stage?
Reviewed by Jeanette Cooper 5/30/2008
Masterfully written. Your descriptive poetry makes one feel what the person was feeling because we can relate to the thought being conveyed. Well done, Dawn.
Reviewed by Chantilly Lace (Reader) 5/30/2008
Excellent writing..love this ..well done sweet lady...have a wonderful and safe day..Hugssss
Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan 5/30/2008
an excellent write-says much about your character!
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton (Reader) 5/30/2008
Over the years the words "I'm sorry" has actually lost its meaning because of the news media's constant endeavors to make people say those words . . . A man or woman can commit a heinous crime and if they say they are sorry it seems he has suddenly become a much nicer fellow . . . On a persona level the same applies to some extent . . . People do bad things to their so0called loved ones knowing that the two words will give them a chance to do it again and again . . . Of course the fellow in this excellent poem doesn't even have the wherewithal to utter them . . .
Reviewed by Paul Berube 5/30/2008
Dawn,

For some, those words are very hard to say. So many breakups and so many friends lost for the sake of pride and stubborness. That picture is a perfect example of on being high and dry. Peace, Love and Blessings Always, Paul.



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