Beach Bums & Love (Part 2) for Fee
by Christine Alwin
Thursday, August 21, 2008
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Fee, Hope you don't mind all in fun,,, my response to Fee's poem 'Beach Bums and Love. |
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Barefoot sittin' on a log,
Writing a poem for the man I long.
Simple dress, sand between toes,
Mind wanders, as the tide goes,
My heart in granules on the beach,
Wishing you were within reach.
Wind whispers against my neck,
Imagining your breath, what the heck,
My walls have come down,
With a smile of this once frown.
Lets build a sandcastle,
Pick up the pieces, with no hassle,
Meet me after closing time,
Make this heart whole of mine.
Sing a song around the fire's glow,
Like you did so long ago,
Lets dream, under the stars in the sky,
I will be wearing only, but your neck tie.
Writing a poem, sittin' on a log,
Waiting for you to walk through this fog.
8-21-08
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| Reviewed by Joyce Bell |
3/15/2010 |
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I LIKE THIS WORK WITH ITS BUMPY FLOW THAT HAS A WONDERFUL RHYME SCHEME AND TERRIFIC IMAGERY. THANKS FOR SHARING AND LOVE,
JOYCE * HIS INSPIRATIONS |
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| Reviewed by Carole Mathys |
9/2/2008 |
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Absolutely enchanting...love the feel of this one, and who could go
wrong with a beach write. Will have to go back and catch up on the other poems.
Carole~ |
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| Reviewed by John Flanagan |
8/28/2008 |
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Perfect setting for the feelings expressed here. So enjoyable and worthwhile.
John |
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| Reviewed by ~ Holly Harbridge (Reader) |
8/28/2008 |
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| A very nicely written poem. Love Holly |
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| Reviewed by Bonnie May |
8/26/2008 |
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| So cute and flows perfectly with your spirit. Missed you too. Love, Bonnie |
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| Reviewed by Dawn Anderson |
8/25/2008 |
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| Christine, I like this so much...comes through like a song. |
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| Reviewed by William Bonilla |
8/25/2008 |
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Excellent write Christine
I like this one very much
Love & peace be with you
William
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| Reviewed by Theresa Koch |
8/25/2008 |
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| This is fabulous |
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
8/23/2008 |
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Great response to Fee'!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by Poetess of The Soul Sheila G |
8/22/2008 |
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This 2nd part Christine is absolutely beautiful and I can feel the mist over the beach! You and Fee did this BEACH BUM LOVERS poem GRAND!
You have such a heart of gold and in your lines it shows!
What a WoNDERFUL easy flow!
Glad to have gravitated to your kind and caring heart Christine!
WRITE-ON!
Warmest Blessings and Inner Peace, Warrior Purple Passion Soulful SHEExoooo
STay Positive!
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| Reviewed by Amber Moonstone |
8/22/2008 |
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I love this response poem, you are awesome!! Fee is awesome to, you both should collaborate that would be quite fantastic.
You are a very special person Christine, so glad to have met you here.
Peace, love, and light,
Amber "V" |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
8/22/2008 |
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Fantastic poem Christine! Your message is loud and clear!Love the pic too!
ET |
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| Reviewed by Mr. Ed |
8/22/2008 |
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| What a great response to Mr. Fee's poem, Christine! |
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| Reviewed by Paul Berube |
8/22/2008 |
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| You made me smile with this one. Well written and a very cute write. |
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| Reviewed by Jon Willey |
8/21/2008 |
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| -- there is no fog in the clarity of this magnificent love poem Christine -- keep on the tie -- I'm on my way -- don't let the wind become to intimate with its whispering on your neck -- this is really a wonderful piece -- God bless -- JMW |
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| Reviewed by Rose Rideout |
8/21/2008 |
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A great write Christine as I knew Fee would be more than pleased. A great write, thank you for sharing.
Newfie hugs, Rose |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
8/21/2008 |
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Christine I am truly honored and flattered that my poem inspired and helped create such a lovely write as you have offered here. I almost missed it for I didn't receive the notification about it for some reason (AD screw up again) but my cuz told me about it and so glad she die. After reading this I can see we defiantely do have to do a collab sometime.
hugs and beach sand burns
Fee |
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| Reviewed by Elizabeth Price |
8/21/2008 |
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| Delightful is right. Liz |
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| Reviewed by Ed Matlack |
8/21/2008 |
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| If Fee doesn't show up through that fog, I'm game...;)ed |
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| Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado |
8/21/2008 |
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Delightful! BRAVA, Christine; love it!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D |
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