Isn't new, but it's new to AD. Reason I never posted it is. . .I don't know. Like a piece torn from a child's heart, and that child just happened to be me. To be perfectly honest, when Dancing Still won the Dan Sullivan Memorial Contest for poetry (this was back awhile), I thought, It wasn't me, it was the angel I was writing about. I have since written other poems about Patty and her angel mother, but this one comes close to saying it all. Best I can do to explain. Always, and Then, Phyllis
One moment you were on your sagging porch
cavorting to the sturm und drang of an August
strangler. Cymbals clanged and thunder clapped,
telling us it would be your final performance.
Telling you? Rain! you sang with all the voice
you had left. Rain!! God, but I love
a good storm. Lightning pale and lightning
thin, light as the wisps of mist-silvered hair
framing your leukemia ravaged face,
you electrified. Ravished coal sky ogled
you through a net of catch-as-can-patched
screen, only light an eke from your kitchen
and the pyrotechnic glow that was you.
IS, this rain whispers, then taps in Morse code.
No more florist daffodils and horrid pink
satin. Still laughing, still shining, still a star....
Reluctant to go in, I jump in a puddle,
let water stream until thunder applauds.
(c) Phyllis Jean Green, 2006
Angels That Care
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|Reviewed by Barbara Henry
A wonderful work of art,and a touching tribute.
I was immediately drawn into this poem!
|Reviewed by Barbara Terry
|This is great Pea, and it brings back memories of how I tried to show my mother what love really is. Even though we never got along and she sent me to her private hell, I miss her so much and wish I could have one more day so we could actually talk. This brought back the memories of her lying in her hospital bed, ravaged by lung cancer, and slowly drifting away from us. I can see why this won such a memorable award. You have given us all something to think about. Thank you for sharing.
May the Lord Bless you, and those whom you love, and be with you always, and walk by your side. With love in my heart, joy to the world, peace on earth, & ((((((((((MANY WONDERFUL SISTERLY HUGGGGSSSS)))))))))), your den sister Barbie
|Reviewed by Sheila Roy
|A real moment. Vivid and sweet. Hugs,
|Reviewed by Carole Mathys
|WOW...I can see why this won Pea, very powerful write!
|Reviewed by Michelle Mead
|I love this, Phyllis. One of your best.|
|Reviewed by Ronald Hull
|I can see why it won.
|Reviewed by Dayvid Graybill
|What a powerful poem! It grabbed at my soul and threw it around a bit.
|Reviewed by Liana Margiva
|BEAUTIFUL POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Liana Margiva|
|Reviewed by pat medlin
|oh m' gosh....thi s is a hmmmm....3 reader|
|Reviewed by Christine Alwin
|My goodness, this ran through my viens....Magnificent Pea!
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
|I can see why it won, Pea. Stunning -- undone at every level by the power in these lines. Well done.
(((HUGS))) and love, Karla.
|Reviewed by Karen Palumbo
|You do have a way of grabbing the heart and soul, no wonder this one won....
Be always safe,
|Reviewed by Roger Ochs
|So glad you posted this. It is a winner on every level.|
|Reviewed by John Flanagan
|Your style then was tighter, Pea, more image heavy but still had the 'Pea Touch', that way thoughts and feelings are delivered as if by mail handed in at the front door.
This is strong and vibrant and very worthy.
|Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan
|powerful and so touching :)|
|Reviewed by Christine Tsen
|Your powerful spirit and feelings shine so brightly in this poem, so wonderful.
|Reviewed by TONY NERONE
|Another beautiful written piece by you Dear Lady.
GOD BLESS YOU
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|Reviewed by Marcia Duning (Reader)
|Nice but sad. Proud of you and thanks|