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| Reviewed by Jane Noponen Perinacci |
6/23/2012 |
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You two must have been making quite a rukus in there! Rock on!
Love ya!
Jane |
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| Reviewed by Vivian Dawson |
6/22/2012 |
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You had me *Jerry* until you
threw me with the unexpected
ending, but then you can be
a master at that....
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
6/21/2012 |
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lol ... ""You'll have to pick me up and carry me." for a moment there you must of thought she wanted to get hitched ...
you should have the little girl "but i'm not hurting yer mom!" |
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| Reviewed by Budd Nelson |
6/21/2012 |
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Jerry,
wonderful story my friend, never been in that exact one but close.
Budd |
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| Reviewed by Andy Turner |
6/21/2012 |
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I'm still laughing at - The sucking of each-others tongues - Blunt and to the point.
Enjoy the way you speak to the reader.
Once again this has that air of mystery.
The kid calling the kops, for robbing her mum. :) Nice write, Jerry. |
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| Reviewed by Patrick Granfors |
6/21/2012 |
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| That's what you get for dating underage mothers. Patrick |
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| Reviewed by Ronald Hull |
6/21/2012 |
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This reads like a memoir that turned into a nightmare. I know the feeling. Danced with so many…
Ron |
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| Reviewed by Amber Moonstone |
6/21/2012 |
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You should have locked the door...
Nice one Jerry!
Peace, love and light,
Amber |
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| Reviewed by Richard King |
6/21/2012 |
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| Nice story, Jerry. Surprise ending, but I like it, you never disappoint. Dick |
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| Reviewed by Odin Roark |
6/21/2012 |
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| That last line allows for some interesting interpretation. Kind of akin to "Derek, when are you going to do it?" |
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| Reviewed by Annabel Sheila |
6/21/2012 |
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Busted! Wasn't expecting that last line...giggle...
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| Reviewed by Laura Fall |
6/21/2012 |
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Wow, Jerry a fascinating tale indeed Laura
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| Reviewed by Ed Matlack |
6/21/2012 |
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| Yeah, I could see where the 8 year thing could put a damper on what was going on...;-) e |
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| Reviewed by Lily of Lough Neagh C. Dennis-Woosley |
6/21/2012 |
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Do what? I think I am missing something here. Everything sounded wonderful in fact at first I thought this was a metaphor. Actually it is wonderful, but I wonder why the 8 year old daughter ruined everything unless... it was an 8 year old habit that was catching up. You really have me thinking on this one! It to me seems more like a puzzle! At the end why was it ruined because of this! Great one, I like this... it really has me thinking!
Love and Light
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