|Reviewed by Jane Noponen Perinacci
|You two must have been making quite a rukus in there! Rock on!
|Reviewed by Vivian Dawson
|You had me *Jerry* until you
threw me with the unexpected
ending, but then you can be
a master at that....
|Reviewed by jude forese
|lol ... ""You'll have to pick me up and carry me." for a moment there you must of thought she wanted to get hitched ...
you should have the little girl "but i'm not hurting yer mom!"
|Reviewed by Budd Nelson
wonderful story my friend, never been in that exact one but close.
|Reviewed by Andy Turner
|I'm still laughing at - The sucking of each-others tongues - Blunt and to the point.
Enjoy the way you speak to the reader.
Once again this has that air of mystery.
The kid calling the kops, for robbing her mum. :) Nice write, Jerry.
|Reviewed by Patrick Granfors
|That's what you get for dating underage mothers. Patrick|
|Reviewed by Ronald Hull
|This reads like a memoir that turned into a nightmare. I know the feeling. Danced with so manyÖ
|Reviewed by Amber Moonstone
|You should have locked the door...
Nice one Jerry!
Peace, love and light,
|Reviewed by Richard King
|Nice story, Jerry. Surprise ending, but I like it, you never disappoint. Dick|
|Reviewed by Odin Roark
|That last line allows for some interesting interpretation. Kind of akin to "Derek, when are you going to do it?"|
|Reviewed by Annabel Sheila
|Busted! Wasn't expecting that last line...giggle...
|Reviewed by Laura Fall
|Wow, Jerry a fascinating tale indeed Laura
|Reviewed by Ed Matlack
|Yeah, I could see where the 8 year thing could put a damper on what was going on...;-) e|
|Reviewed by Lily of Lough Neagh C. Dennis-Woosley
|Do what? I think I am missing something here. Everything sounded wonderful in fact at first I thought this was a metaphor. Actually it is wonderful, but I wonder why the 8 year old daughter ruined everything unless... it was an 8 year old habit that was catching up. You really have me thinking on this one! It to me seems more like a puzzle! At the end why was it ruined because of this! Great one, I like this... it really has me thinking!
Love and Light