|Reviewed by Debbie Lacy
|This poem brings back a memory Betsy! Umm sweet tender pleasure of love ecstacy on the beach! I love it! Thanks for sharing :)
|Reviewed by Maddy van Deevers (Reader)
|Another good one....however the last line sort of bugged me for some reason, I think because of the overt reference to sex, while the rest of the poem is oblique. as a suggestion, perhaps something like: "We've had the tastiest time on the beach"
Something like that would, in my eyes at any rate, maintain the feel of the rest of the piece.
Good stuff...Write on...
|Reviewed by satan165 aka bigbossman (Reader)
|nice refering to the sex as 'tasty', thats very vivid|
|Reviewed by No Longer Member (Reader)
|You lose a point for steamy/dreamy....but at least it's a bit more subtle. I like subtle poetry, but don't think I'm judging you when I review.|
|Reviewed by Dennis Michels
|Very nice, and you kindly left out the sand in the cravasse reference. :-)|
|Reviewed by Charles McKenzie (Reader)
|More, baby, more...gimme more|
|Yes! On the beach! Excellent place to be.;)|
|Reviewed by Margie Hess
|i'd like two of those with little umbrellas please. this is very good betsy, was it good for you too?|