Beautiful Lonely Eyes Part 1 [the pianist]
by jing javier
Saturday, November 23, 2002
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I glance down the darkened hallway,
Trembling with suppressed emotion,
Music pours forth like cool water from an eternal spring.
I can see his profile through the gauzy curtains.
His hands stroke the keys so confidently,
Pressing down on black and white gracefully yet firmly.
I pull my thoughts back in
And concentrate on the clock before me.
Seconds tick away.
The hollow, empty noise taunting me.
The empty hallway reverberates with sound
And my shallow gasps of breath.
The door to the practice room opens
I stand, shaking, inexplicably petrified, and tiptoe to the door,
Peering into the brightness from the shadow outside.
Suddenly, I feel weak.
Standing here watching him,
I feel like a fragile insect caught in a spider’s seductive web.
He looks up, suddenly, and seeing me,
Blinks slowly in surprise.
I feel a warm blush creep across my face.
“Hi,” I say, awkwardly,
Hoping to fill the silence.
My words expand and crush the beautiful stillness.
He studies me intently and I watch him watching me.
I see myself, as he must:
Sad eyes, quivering like a leaf.
I feel light, carefree and giddy.
The expression in his eyes tells me something that words cannot,
And I know that we have an understanding.
I’ve been waiting for something like this my whole life,
This sudden quick sureness that makes me walk slowly
And look at the world in a new light.
I realize that I am standing in his way
And move to the side,
Watching him leave with a terrible longing.
At the door he turns and our eyes meet,
His curious and searching, mine lonely.
“You have beautiful eyes,” he says at last.
Then he walks out of the room and into the dimness beyond.
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|Reviewed by Alexander Shaumyan (Reader)
|You should ask him for piano lessons. Very good!|
|Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
|Jing, this packs a powerful emotional punch, exceptional work.|
|Reviewed by richard poor
|as humans we need to talk more...this is very good!!!|
|Reviewed by Katy Walsvik
|I am a pianist. This is so filled with aching and longing.. but there is always hope.. go after him. Shine your light on him. Your poem is simply lovely. katy.|
|Reviewed by Ted Sheridan (Reader)
|Hit every note|
|Reviewed by Roger Ochs
|Gorgeous! The light of my life is a pianist and I know your words are eternal truths.|
|Reviewed by Dee C.
|A novels full of emotion...excellent write Jing! ~ Dee|
|Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen
|A beautiful poem, very well written, keep up the great work!
|Reviewed by *********** ********** (Reader)
|Very well thought out..Some fine images Jing. Ty, Dani|
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|I like the mood you captured here Jing...like a scene from a romantic movie beautifully done!|
|Reviewed by Donna Quesinberry
|i like the interludes here
the voyeuristic nature that accompanies all attractions
|Reviewed by Amor Sabor
|I am a musician myself, Jing. I play the piano in a group and I had dreaded practice today while whining to myself how much I wanted to avoid it. Your write humbled me into remembering the joy it brings others and how fortunate I am to have this gift. I feel guilty now and yet I am newly inspired to dismiss my earlier whining enough so that it is not just a job but an act of sharing. Thank you.
|Reviewed by Marilyn Seray
|Great imagery, and very well written|