|Reviewed by Amberly Latham
|I loved your chosen words here, Lindsay. All I suggest is that you use linking words to paint a certain picture, as if you were drawing one of your beautiful doodles. Building rhythm into meaning would be even better to use for this poem, I think. And maybe look for where you would place your words in each line to brighten your theme. Happy New Years, Ice Queen!|
|Reviewed by William M. Sowman
|Lindsay ... sort of like the X files or the hidden files that contain everything you need to know? I doubt if you will every unlock the riddle. Happy New Year. Bill Murray|
|Reviewed by john zimmerman
|there is power in your words, power enough to compensate for the typos ---
i am undecided as to the effectiveness of non-punctuation. it does make the reader work to understand what you are saying.
you run the risk of p.ssinug off the reader...
those two issues aside this is a strong write