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|Reviewed by William M. Sowman
|Carissa, about the song/poem. I ran through it in my mind, and it does have potential to be made into a song. It takes a lot of work and there is a certain structure and form to mke it into a repetitive pattern. Most poetry can be made into a song. But a successful song idea is hard to come up with. Check my last song: "A Castle In The Sand." The strongest thing abut it is the TITLE. When I fooled around, I came up with the title and then it ws easy to work around it. Usually I need to come up with a title and the first line. Note how I broke it down.
Verse, Chorus, Bridge, Tag. I was working with a formula; so that the cmposer could look at it and easily figure out music for it. This is hard work and takes practie. You have to much free flow. To develope a song like this ... you need a skilled composer to be working with you to create music that is not structered. This can be done. Probably, some of you greatest songs are done this way. Take a song like "Moon River" the music ws written first by Henry Mancini and then the lyrics by Johnny Mercer.
This is harder to do. But what I am saying there are many other ways to creat a song.
I used the Nashville formula. And it words for me on most of what I can do alone. Where I teamed with someone ... I could do many other things to create songs. Hope this helps you a little. Your friend ... Bill
P.S. I was able to use what are known as poser words. like ... mirage, sand, oasis.
Working words that connotate strength and force to impact the song. The lack of power words has always been one of my weakness. Also I have a hard time from making words flow. That makes me structure them. Again I need somoone to work with. You are quite a ways from a success song.
But keep trying and try to work around a strong. "A Castle In The Sand." Is a strong song idea.
|Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
|I think you did that very well.
|Reviewed by Jill Eisnaugle
|Beautiful songwriting...... Keep it up!