My Broken Heart
by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie
Friday, March 28, 2003
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My heart so down today,
Trying to forget the words you say,
But my mind keeps playing them,
Like a broken record,
A shattered gem,
Sparkling on the floor,
Remembering walking out the door...
The thing is I can't remember why,
I felt the need to say good-bye,
Knowing only that I had to flee,
Somehow get free of the hold you had on me...
But I miss you,
Even though you were cruel,
And the lies!
How could you look in my eyes,
And tell me such lies?
You knew I could not trust,
That my heart would be so easy to bust-
Was it really all just a game to you?
So much fun to make me blue?
I am trying to forget you,
Trying not to remember so long ago,
Before you became just another foe,
I had to ward off with my sword,
Baby, You had me floored!
Sent me crashing to the ground,
And now the only sound,
I can hear is my lovely leaves,
The wind blowing softly in the morning breeze,
Whispering to me
That I was such a fool,
Trying to act so cool,
When all I wanted to do,
Was believe in you
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|Reviewed by na na (Reader)
|This is a beutiful bitter sweet writing. So many good things but so many that hurt you. Love your work. bill|
|Reviewed by john zimmerman
the ole "i know its for the best
but what id i made a mistake..."
we live and learn
and pay for our learning
with our tears
|Reviewed by Allen Filius (Reader)
|So sad but yet so beautifuly done.
|Reviewed by Ted Sheridan (Reader)
|Love those last line, isn't that the way it always is? Trust is hard for those who can't trust themselves to be honest.|
|Reviewed by Bianca Boonstra
|Sad poem. Well written though|
|Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
|A very difficult pain isn't it Retta? a gnawing constancy to it all..you certainly do express it well..now you take care of yourself..:) Floria|
|Reviewed by Paul Berube
|Retta, very good write. Torn souls and tattered hearts sad subject.|
|Reviewed by Oisín Breen
|is very sad
a certain sonorous sweet sadness.
mmm there three letter s's.
|Reviewed by Trish - The Trickster
|Retta, we all have the same want to believe, but I guess it depends what we take from it that counts. An exceptionally profound write. Very insightful and excellent. ~Trish~ P.S. Hope it is not from your experience.|
|Reviewed by Christine Morell
|A very poignant poem Reindeer, so beautifully done.
|Reviewed by Tony Nerone
|Good Morning, Retta
You have the uncanny talent to make a sad poem into a write of beauty.
|Reviewed by Marilyn
|Oh boy, Retta, those last two verses sent chills through me. This a "heave and sigh" sorta write with so much realism and imagery
I hope it's fiction?