I feel...Dead
by Kacie Rahm
Sunday, April 13, 2003
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This was brought on by the need for a new style, this is not a style yet tried by me, I hope it fits together and flows okay, it wa a risk stepping out of my comfort zone.
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I feel trapped,I cant adapt to being
Stabbed in the back slipping through the cracks.
I feel betrayed, so afraid of being
Accused, hidden, when only you know I didn't.
I feel disguised, I despise being
Covered by a shield, My true self never revealed.
I feel deceit, I'm so incomplete being
Torn apart by you,got a broken heart from you.
I feel cheated, I've been defeated being
Kicked when I'm weak, I can't even speak.
I feel pain,not this again,you're being
Unfair, unaware? No,you know you cause despair.
I feel used, I was confused being
Led in the wrong direction,with no protection.
I feel gone, nobody to lean on being
Told the words I dread,you killed me I'm dead.
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| Reviewed by Andre Bendavi ben-YEHU |
4/14/2003 |
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Imagination rings the bell of knowledge; art respond to intuition, emotions reaches the
heart... The Poet interprets the sounds, poemizes the feelings and dares to poetize a new
form, and "I feel...Dead” is live! I read it, I feel it, I learn from it, and I say, EUREKA!
A true Poet is commanding the CLASS!
I greet You, Poet Kaci Riann, You are a true picture of real Poet!
Blest be Your heart.
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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| Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper |
4/14/2003 |
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| Stepping out of your comfort zone is good for you. Try it more often. A comfort zone only locks you out of all your possibilities.Good expression. |
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| Reviewed by Marilyn Seray |
4/13/2003 |
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| This is a fantastic poem! |
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| Reviewed by jude forese |
4/13/2003 |
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| always explore new structural modes and poetic veins of thought and you will be successful as you are in this poem... well done! |
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| Reviewed by Alexander Shaumyan (Reader) |
4/13/2003 |
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| Excellent, Kaci. It's great to try new styles. A lot of poets get stuck in one style and one theme. |
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| Reviewed by the phantom pheonix |
4/13/2003 |
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| This was a wonderful poem and it awesoem that you expanding you type of genres I try to also |
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| Reviewed by Kate Clifford |
4/13/2003 |
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| Its great that you are expanding in your attempts. Great write and I am looking forward to reading more. |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
4/13/2003 |
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| wonderful poem, good for you to try all genre's, this makes a well rounded poet. |
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| Reviewed by Sarah Mathews |
4/13/2003 |
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Excellent poem kaci! It flowed perfectly!
~*SARAH*~ |
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