|Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
|Interesting write, grips the heart.|
|Reviewed by Bobbi Duffy
|Let me first say that this poem is almost perfect. check line 3 under should be in caps if the rest of the lines start that way, and the line Lifeless body, may be over kill (pardon the pun) because it makes "dancing eteranally" redudant. But, that's only my opinion. The final decision is yours, it's your work. Good job, both of you.
People do read the books and stories, but most don't leave reviews, at least that's been my experience. The only reviews left on my story, The Birth of the Children of Earth were left by fellow poets.
|Reviewed by jude forese
|very well done! enjoyed reading...|
|Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
|Oh sighhhhhhhhh this is so good you two Bravo.
|Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie
|This was quite excellent, and very sad, I am off to read your book!
|Reviewed by Linda Hill
|Good work, my sweet friend.
Working with you is an honor!:)
|Reviewed by Tony Nerone
|Hi Chad, Hi Linda,
I loved this. I hope you do too.
|Reviewed by Madame X
|Powerful impact on this piece. The images here were very clear and I felt them.|
|Reviewed by Ronald Hull
|This is sad but it lacks a moral, a hook, a higher purpose, or something to touch you deeply like "Little Match Girl". Make it into that if you can.|
|Reviewed by Sandie Angel
|Well, phantom. If this is a fairy tale, please make it a beauty and leave the abuse out.
A fairy tale should be beautiful. I like the beginning of this poem, but not the latter part which I didn't think belonged to a fairy tale.
Thank you for sharing!
P.S. If a little girl was really abused, she would not like to read that part if she thought she was reading a fairy tale. Fairy tales are supposed to be kind and wonderful, sweet and everything nice.
Please make it beautiful for the children....
|Reviewed by A PAX
|very real and haunting|
|Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
|It is a good story, but really needs some work...incompleted sentences and mis-spellings. So since you are huffing and puffing, thought I'd mention it, and why I didn't leave a comment yesterday when I read it. It's hard to read like that, to really get your full meaning. These are things your 'word doc' should have pointed out to you.
But, dear friend, once you get it cleaned up, it will be like all your other work... superb.
Just as this poem is...superb.
Now...bet you will never ask an editor for a comment again . Smiles and good wishes.