Fire Place(Mildly Erotic)
by A PAX
Friday, April 18, 2003
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This was one of the first poems I ever wrote, its a bit clumsey...
Standing so close, by the fire place
The flames from below, softy lighting your face,
I reach up and softy carress, your face with my hand
And know that your mine, forever my man,
Pull you down for a kiss, your mouth sweeter than wine,
Your lips cover my face,
Our love, one of a kind
Kisses so deep, so intense, so sincere,
Cannot hold out much longer, I need all of you near,
I unbutton your shirt, run my hands down your chest,
You reach out for me, and fondle my breasts,
My nipples grow hard, and you trace round their lines,
We push closer together, two bodies one mind
There is something we want,
As ancient as life
To experience each other,
Souls and Bodies unite
I hold your hands and kiss your palms,
You pull me close to you, so safe in your arms,
Our clothes, we have shed, they lay on the floor,
I am wet, you are hard,
Our bodies need more.....
I travel down your stomach, with kisses and licks
Your body it trembles, my insides grow slick
The prelude to loving, the familiar click
Our hearts are now pounding, our breath coming quick
You pull me up, to kiss your face
And lay me down, and take your place
On top of me, you slip deep inside
You are buried within, so deep you hide
And come out again, and again, with each stroke
Bringing me higher to heaven, until your resistance is broke
And we come together again and again,
Knowing its the beginning and never the end
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|Reviewed by The Gentle Man
|I love this Anita.....very erotic and sensual....nice work!|
|Reviewed by T. Emilie Dybevik (Reader)
|YAOWZAH! THIS is ONE HOT piece! HOT DAMN!
|Reviewed by jude forese
|a very lovely ending... well done!|
|Reviewed by Jay G
|In a way isnt it appropriate that this poem should be the seminal event of your creativity??? For which I for one am very grateful!|
|Reviewed by Christine Morell
|Oh my !!
What a brilliant start to writing poetry.
This is perfect..please don't think of changing a word. Mildly indeed! ;)
|Reviewed by Bobbi Duffy
|Don't change a word you can't improve on perfections. If this is mildly erotic, I wonder what pornographic means.|
|Reviewed by na na (Reader)
|Lady A. it is very good and erotice. Don't worry about changing it. You had us revved up and ready to go. Bill Murray|
|Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya
|Dear Anita....superbly done...what a write!!!!!|
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Anita! you wouldn't change one word! When it's good it's good! ooolala...dens on fire;-)|
|Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
|Nicely done first attempt. Would you do it any differently now ? Bravo. I don't know where my first attempts are. Probably the wastebasket. [smiles]|
|Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson
|Well written I think
My first wasn't this good.....
write that is, hee, hee....
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|Wait let me go jump into oh!!!!! my bed before I get................wait...fall dead....I am fast asleep.....but wide awake tooooooo
|Reviewed by James David Compton (Reader)
the only thing I ever get in front of my fireplace is hot.
|Reviewed by Tony Nerone
|Dear Anita, I wish I could write half as good as you did back then.
|Reviewed by Jill Eisnaugle
|Whew! I'm tired now. Oh how I miss those amorous nights!
|Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie
|This was excellent! I wish my first was this good!
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
|wow, lady a...for one of your first writes, you started off afire! :) excellent, descriptive write "it's gettin' hot in here" LOL (((HUGS))) and love, karla. :)|