by ♥ Kari Hirshey ♥
Thursday, April 24, 2003
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Is it the wat he makes you feel,
When staring in his eyes,
Or is it the way he seems unreal,
Like he doesn't even have to try?
Is it how when you're with him,
The world just seems so right,
Or is it how when life seems dim,
He sparks inside you that light?
Is it the way he has no flaws;
To you he's perfect in every way,
Or is it the way he makes you laugh with no cause,
And how flirty you two always play?
But night comes and makes your angel run astray,
Never will he be back,
And to you life seems so much more gray;
Your heart turns a sickly black.
Was it the way god intended it to be,
Making you unruly, broken;
And all of unhappy,
As his words are maliciously spoken?
Was it the way you never believed,
In yourself, having just cause,
As those lonely nights you greived,
Over love's lack of rules and laws?
He has a way of making you feel,
As though you were walking on air,
But daydreams aren't frickin' real;
He never gave a care.
Wake up and see the way,
That everything truly is,
Your friendship has gone astray;
He didn't value your friendship as you did his.
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|Reviewed by Kacie Rahm
|this is great! guys are like that...|
|Reviewed by ya mama (Reader)
|Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader)
|Extremely well written Kari; albeit a bittersweet reminder of things long past, but indeed a noble well written and expressed write!
|Reviewed by J John (Reader)
|Wow .. i was plunged in icey water at the end there .. well penned J & J|
|Reviewed by No Longer Member (Reader)
|Loved the comparision/contrast to this poem.. great job|
|Reviewed by Erica Ivory
|Sound very similar to my Smile and Laugh Or Crash And Burn.. about a one sided friendship.. so sad .. so hard when you really care.. Good write!|
|Reviewed by Digital Fairy
|This struck home to me, a stark reminder of shattered dreams that weren't meant to be.. a very well-written piece :)