by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie
Wednesday, April 30, 2003
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Surrounded by Stone Walls,
So tall, so thick,
You wonder what mason worked this magic
Without using brick.
You try to peer through the cracks,
But my stones are true ,
And hide me from you.
You may be surprised to know,
That each stone can stand alone,
Each stone so carefully chosen,
By a childís hand,
or a young womanís heart eternally frozen.
Stones that are true , hard, and pure.
Stones that made promises
They have kept for centuries
And now keep for me.
They stand between the world and I,
Teaching us not to cry,
Tears that went unshed so long,
It only served to make us strong.
It doesnít even matter what went wrong,
Its over now, the choice made,
The life I left,
The life you failed to saveÖ
Stands on the other side,
You canít get to me,
Itís useless to try.
You may not look here-
You may not visit-
You may touch my wall,
But youíll never touch me.
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|Reviewed by xxx xxx (Reader)
|wonderful beauty always has a simplicity that belies the fine craftsmanship underneath. this is beautiful truly beautiful....you are that nice reindeer i have seen in fireside arent you lol|
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|Good Job Retta!!|
|Reviewed by Christine Morell
|A stunning piece Reindeer. Bravo
|Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya
|Reviewed by Jacqueline VanZandbeek
|This is a remarkable piece of work.
I especially like this part:
"Each stone so carefully chosen,
By a childís hand"
Awesome! I can relate to this. 30 years of a tall thick wall, and no one is getting in!
|Reviewed by Rodney Bohen
Sister, I liked this piece a whole bunch ok? I liked the way it was hung,and spun, it fell nicely like a fine garmentfalls and collapses round a pretty ladies shoulders, yes nicely woven,nicely done, thank you
|Reviewed by jude forese
|sometimes we surround ourselves to prevent being hurt... we must break down our own walls to let the sun shine in...|
|Reviewed by Trixie Love
I could relate...
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Excellent write Reindeer, I love your rhyme and flow...the strongest wall is that of the will, for only we can let one through it....|
|Reviewed by Marilyn Seray
|so sad Reindeer. a poem well done|
|Reviewed by Dove (Reader)
|Stunning strength you show..Beautiful power and light in you Retta..|
|Reviewed by William Bonilla
a wonderful write
|Reviewed by Tony Nerone
|Dear Retta, Yes you are amazing your writing is excellent.
|Reviewed by Dale Clark
|Reviewed by *********** ********** (Reader)
|The view from stone walls can be amazing.....Another excellent poem..the depth of your thinking is fantastic.....ty, Dani|
|Reviewed by ya mama (Reader)