by Candida L Eittreim
Friday, May 23, 2003
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Thank you Michael... for the inspiration
Rain falls softly,
The streets blackened with heavens tears.
Alone, the building stands,
Grey stone, tiny windows set in it’s cold embrace.
A small door
Lit by a single red lamp,
Admits the furtive few…
Gaslights glow dimly in the silent wetscape
Of the mean streets.
A solitary figure stands there,
Rain streaming down his upturned face
Mixed with tears of sorrow.
His baggy workingmans trousers bespattered by rain and mud.
White shirt plastered to his aching back
Sleeves rolled up,
His old felt cap twisting endlessly in his large careworn hands.
Hours he stands there
Listening to the husky, dusky moans from her window,
His old heart aching with sorrow and love,
After countless days and long agonizing seconds of pain,
He sees her emerge.
Hair, golden as the sun itself,
Her blue eyes.. red and swollen
Her thin arms hugging her aching body,
As she makes her way carefully down the front stoop.
Feeling someones gaze, she turns cynically,
Already rejecting another violation,
And sees his loving face.
Shame courses through her,
Defiant pride shields her battered heart
Lifting her small face
Waiting for harsh words to batter her yet again
The lined face staring at her,
Crumples in grief…
Two words only..
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|Reviewed by Michael Kersting
|Great Poetry..keep it up !|
|Reviewed by Debra Stiles, The Original Mister
|Very heart felt. I could feel the pain in your words. Wonderful my friend.
|Reviewed by jude forese
|the emotional intensity in this poem is outstanding!|
|Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
|Candida, This is amazing, felt it to the depths of my heart.|
|Reviewed by The Gentle Man
|Candida this is simply incredible......such powerful and strong emotions....excellently written!|
|Reviewed by Bill Murray
|Candida, you are a woman of remarkable skills. Outstanding poem and your poetry and bio indicate a writer of wonderful talent. Your poem brought such strong emotion to my heart ... that it reaches inside of me and jerks tears from it. I could not help my self. WHAT A BRILLIANT POEM! Bill|
|Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader)
|EXCELLANCE in EVERY WAY Candida!!!!
|Reviewed by Zenith Elliott
|Heartfelt words indeed...life can be so unfair at times, but onward we trudge! Excellent write Candy.|
|Reviewed by Rodney Bohen
Very hot, very good, well penned, excellent,
|Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
|Reviewed by Elizabeth Taylor (Reader)
|Reviewed by Joseph* OneLight*®
|Wow Candy ... This is piercing! Forgiveness is the key to Love.