by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie
Wednesday, June 18, 2003
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We gather together today,
Brothers and sisters, aunts and uncles,
And it struck me how things never change,
Though the years fall like autumn leaves,
Leaving a blanket of beauty on the earth below,
And we lay to rest one of our own…
The scene was so strange to see,
For as I look around me,
I see a line of division so keen…
My father’s tribe stands to the left,
Speaking their native tongue,
They are a quiet people,
And they whisper softly when they talk,
All the men so tall and brave,
And I realized,
I didn’t know very many of their names…
My mother’s people are small and loud,
Talking to loudly,
Laughing too often,
Their eyes shine like glass-
They stood on the right,
In bright colored clothes,
And I listened as they laughed…
Telling each other,
Remembering the stories,
Of all the things you once did…
But still it struck me odd,
That it looked like two
It was the children that caught my eye,
They did not seem to know,
That someone had died,
And they played together,
As though they were one tribe…
The quiet and the shy,
The loud and brave,
Stood side by side…
And I realized in that moment,
The hope for the future,
Lay in those tender hands…
For they did not speak the same dialect,
Yet found a way to say,
“Come on let’s play…”
So when it came my turn to speak,
I could not help but to forget the words
I had so carefully planned,
And shared instead all I had seen,
Hoping you would understand-
On this lovely autumn day,
That line of division,
I have seen through out my life,
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|Reviewed by serenety L
|Excellent. You painted a great pic of the Indians. Loved reading it. S.|
|Reviewed by Kate Clifford
|You make the reader become part of the story in the most amazing and beautiful way. I could feel the different tribes become one with your words. A child will lead us :-)|
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|always powerful, meaningful and outstanding !|
|Reviewed by Sanil nath (Reader)
|Excellent write dear friend. You are so kind to write this. Keep it up.
|Reviewed by jude forese
|excellent write! powerful significance...|
|Reviewed by Trish - The Trickster
|A truly exceptional write, with a powerful message. Wonderful...children are the key to the future...always. ~Trish~|
|Reviewed by Nancy D.
|Great write, only if all tribes would come together that easy.
|Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK
My Favorite Thing To Write About, No Doubt Z Best!
|Reviewed by Steve Ralph
|i love this,, and i think it is true of all walks of lik=fe it seems that way anytime my own family get together they all go off into their own little cliques, as you say like seperate tribes,
beautifuly written Retta
|Reviewed by Cathy Montgomery (Reader)
|Love the conclusion to this beautifully touching poem! Wonderful message...|
|Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader)
|Rhetta this is AWESOME and you do the great spirits proud...what wisdom, truth and wonder you have expelled from within this noble write for all to sit, read, learn and ponder!!!!
|Reviewed by Amor Sabor
|You relayed this intensely, Retta. Excellent write.
|Reviewed by Marilyn Seray
|Reindeer, yes, the children of the future. such a shame that they can'
t hold onto that little part of them where there is no "line of division"
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|always a joy to read you!!|
|Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado
|intriguing write, reindeer, and so well done! (((HUGS))) and love, your friend in texas, karen lynn. :)|
|Reviewed by Carolyn Red Bear (The Bear Paw)
|Retta, this is so poignant...from the intelligence of children and their innate intuition, to the adults who hopefully see what you seen that day... this gives hope....thank you for sharing....
|Reviewed by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
this is absolutely stunning in its presentation--well done
(((HUGS))) and love,
|Reviewed by Joseph* OneLight*®
|A spellbinding write ... I enjoyed this so much!
|Reviewed by nevine Al Seidi
|Great thought and translation of a noble sentiment.
|Reviewed by Gwen Dickerson
|You are such an insightful writer. It's always a joy to read your works!|
|Reviewed by Paul Berube
|Retta, excellent write. Children know the universal language.|
|Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
This is awesome and your pic is so
I love your poetry!!!
|Reviewed by Ed Lupinacci (Reader)
|written like a vision quest it brought me right into the fold.
|Reviewed by Tony Nerone
You always write with great clarity. I never have to try to read between the lines. Your work is a complete joy to read! Thank You for writing this great read.
|Reviewed by Erin Kelly-Moen
|:) Wonderful message in this intriguing piece, Retta!! Better futures are held in the hands of children...|