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The Darkness Within
by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie

Tuesday, July 22, 2003

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You come to me,
But I can’t see,
What it is,
You want me to be…
Can’t believe the words you speak,
And you don’t hear me baby,
When I whisper,
Just how much,
I care for you.
What our friendship
Means to me…

Now my world is cast in darkness,
Your light shines no more,
I have shadowed your soul,
And you are no longer
The man I use to know…

You can’t seem to see-
That what I am is real,
All my thoughts are sealed,
So deep within,
That they cannot be revealed…


So you come to me,
Like a shadow in the night,
A dream only I can see,
A man I want to believe,
Is real and whole,
But I just don’t know,
If I can believe,
All the things you say,
For I have learned to well,
The stories men tell,
And watch them leave,
After making me believe
All their lies,
Told in such an earnest voice,
Leaving me no choice,
But to love and later burn
With such passion
All that I have learned…

Scored those words with white hot steel,
Carving the truth for all to see,
How could you love someone like me?
My hands bloody and scarred,
My heart blackened and hard…
What is it you see?
Why be a friend to one such as me?

So I hide,
And bide my time,
Thinking of the words you say,
Maybe I’ll believe them someday,
But I can’t just now,
The past still burns most foul,
Empty letters with lies,
The tears falling from my eyes,
As I hear the words you say,
And cannot tell you,
I love you today,
Maybe never will,
But God how the memory
Of your weeping haunts me still….

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Reviewed by serenety L 8/2/2003
Sad one Retta, though an excellent work
S
Reviewed by Kate Clifford 7/24/2003
Very sad and heart touching. Great write!
Reviewed by Russ Okamura 7/23/2003
Your poetry reaches deep and grabs me at the depth of my soul and tears my very heart. Your artistry truly has powerful passion.
Reviewed by Sandie Angel 7/23/2003
This was deep. Love the intensity of this.

May Lu a.k.a. Sandie Angel :o)
Reviewed by jude forese 7/23/2003
powerfully expressive...
Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya 7/22/2003
Excellentg write!!!
Reviewed by Jack Roberts 7/22/2003
Excellent write Reindeer!

Jack

Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson 7/22/2003
Touching and well worth the read.......
Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader) 7/22/2003
Rhetta excellant raw emotion in this piece, and WHEW what a emotional roller coaster ride!
((((Hugs))))
~Nikki~
Reviewed by Steve Joos 7/22/2003
This is a very sad, emotional poem. The last few lines were especially gripping. We have all had our hearts broken and broken some hearts as well.
Reviewed by Sanil nath (Reader) 7/22/2003
Excellent Retta .... So nice and beautiful from your heart... sad lines anyway ..

"So I hide,
And bide my time,
Thinking of the words you say,
Maybe I’ll believe them someday,
But I can’t just now,
The past still burns most foul,
Empty letters with lies,
The tears falling from my eyes,
As I hear the words you say,
And cannot tell you,
I love you today,
Maybe never will,
But God how the memory
Of your weeping haunts me still…. "

Thinking of you now ...
How sad you will be ...
Thinking of you now ...
What made u write this .
I see your heart crying ...
Wish your heart never ever weeped like this ...
Wish you always be happy ...
Wish you always keep smiling ...
Wish u have a good time ...

Excellet write Retta ..

Sanil
Reviewed by Maria Lupinacci 7/22/2003
Reindeer,
That ending whoa! This does grab a hold, and doesn't let go! Very powerful work!

Hugs,
Maria
Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader) 7/22/2003
Reindeer,
This is so excellent
"Scored those words with white hot steel,
Carving the truth for all to see,
How could you love someone like me?
My hands bloody and scarred,
My heart blackened and hard…
What is it you see?
Why be a friend to one such as me? "
PJ
Reviewed by Tinka Boukes 7/22/2003
Can relate to this one Retta!!

Love
Tinka
Reviewed by E T Waldron 7/22/2003
Such an emotionl ride, makes the senses reel with sadness.Excellent as always!
Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader) 7/22/2003
Painful and braveness, admiration
Reviewed by David Knight 7/22/2003
'Of your weeping haunts me still…. '
Haunting is the right word.
Reviewed by Lisa Hilbers 7/22/2003
~tears~ I felt the agony within your words,,the being torn apart by the, should I's or shouldn't I's,,great write this is,,~SH~
Reviewed by Christine Morell 7/22/2003
Heartfelt words, Reindeer, written with such passion. Very touching.
~Chrissie
Reviewed by Ed Lupinacci (Reader) 7/22/2003
Peeling away the layers here bring out so much intensity and emotion
Reviewed by Leland Waldrip 7/22/2003
"The stories men tell,
And watch them leave,
After making me believe
All their lies,
Told in such an earnest voice,
Leaving me no choice,
But to love and later burn
With such passion
All that I have learned…"
Powerful description, Retta. Good write.
Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader) 7/22/2003
Grips the heart with raw emotion.
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