My Stone Cave
by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie
Wednesday, August 20, 2003
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* Dark Poetry..*
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My Stone Cave
Always asking,
Where I go,
Don’t think you really
Want to know…
Down so deep inside,
A secret place,
I found to hide…
When I was a child,
I found a rock cave,
Hidden in the giant slabs,
Thrown by an angry God,
It is safe,
And dark,
So deep within the earth,
And no one,
Could touch me there,
No more pain,
No more screaming,
To drive me insane…
A slender crack,
Slid right through,
Not big enough for you-
Only a child could do,
The things I had to-
Brought a blanket,
My books and pens,
Wrote by candle light,
Until the night closed in…
Safe, and dark,
And alone…
I stayed there when I could,
Longer than perhaps I should,
Made it my home,
Loved being alone,
Huge shoulders of God,
Wrapped around me,
Felt so good…
Then one day,
I didn’t fit anymore…
Could no longer slide in the door
Of my hidden place…
For years I returned,
And sat on the heavy stone,
Wishing I were thin enough
Just one more time,
Wouldn’t matter if I couldn’t get out,
That wasn’t what this was about…
So I found a new way in,
I took the cave out,
And put it in me,
Now you see,
Where I go,
Over the meadow,
And through the mountain,
To the stone cave of my heart…
And God’s strong shoulders,
Still keeps the others out…
Safe and dark and alone,
In my cave of stone,
You wanted me to show,
Where I go,
When I need to be alone,
Do you feel better now,
That you know?
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| Reviewed by Michelle Hudson (Reader) |
8/27/2003 |
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Time and space that was fitting for you, such a prescious gift, the stone cave.
this is a very well written poem I enjoyed very much!
Blessings, Michelle |
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| Reviewed by Kate Clifford |
8/21/2003 |
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| You are very fortunte to have found such a wonderful spot and then be able to take it within in when the physical could no longer go. Wonderful write. |
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| Reviewed by Nicole Davis Vergara (Reader) |
8/21/2003 |
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~WHEW~
How befitting that I be reading this as I am listening to Warrior Chant by Carlos Nakai!
Geez Retta dark poetry or not this is PERFECT, such excellant expression with awesome imagery...I LOVE IT!!!!
((((Hugs))))
~Nikki~ |
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| Reviewed by nevine Al Seidi |
8/21/2003 |
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Superb image and great resolution, Reindeer!
Something is suddenly happening at the Den. Everyone seems to be delivering their best - Join the crew!
Nevine Al Seidi |
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| Reviewed by Mark Mahoney |
8/21/2003 |
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| Just like where i've often been, well done, i love this, a great write...take care...Mark |
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| Reviewed by Woman Words (Reader) |
8/21/2003 |
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| Such a meaningful, introspective poem...one we can all relate to...thank you! |
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| Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader) |
8/21/2003 |
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| Heart gripping, I have one of those stone caves too. |
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| Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya |
8/21/2003 |
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| Reindeer...wow...this is not a poem...this is gem of poem...I salute you....BHUWAN |
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
8/20/2003 |
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I can relate to this one Retta!!
Dark and cold...and so alone!!
love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by Jenni Kalicharan |
8/20/2003 |
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Excellent write.. I can relate to this.
Jenni |
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| Reviewed by Jaclynn Huntington |
8/20/2003 |
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Beautiful, dear lady. This made me miss my own escape which was to the woods. I have missed that and need to find a way to put that inside me as you have. Wonderful write.
~Jackie~ |
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| Reviewed by Handsum Hart |
8/20/2003 |
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| I like the different turns this poem takes, makes it so enjoyable to read. peace |
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| Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader) |
8/20/2003 |
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| I don't find it dark, but solitude which we all crave from time to time, someone once said showme a man who can find peace in solitude and i'll show you a man who's stable and never ill, great write |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
8/20/2003 |
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| Reindeer, we all seem to have a facsimile to your cave, in one way or another we must have a place to escape to, no matter what our age;-)I agree with Jay;-)...Your ability to make it into an outstanding poem speaks to us all! |
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| Reviewed by Tony Nerone |
8/20/2003 |
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Another great write by you, Rein.
Kudos!
tony:) |
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| Reviewed by The Gentle Man |
8/20/2003 |
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| I think many of us can relate to these feelings. I know I've lived in my own"cave" for years. Thanks for sharing! |
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| Reviewed by Floreann Cawley |
8/20/2003 |
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| excellent and brilliant write..Floreann |
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| Reviewed by Steve Joos |
8/20/2003 |
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| I think there's a place like that for all of us, some only in our minds. Thanks for sharing this poem |
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| Reviewed by Jackie Brooks |
8/20/2003 |
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| A safe but lonely place to be, don't let the exit get to small. Jackie <> < |
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| Reviewed by Sanil nath (Reader) |
8/20/2003 |
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yeah what peggy said is right.
hey Retta ...
I love you somuch ...
Wish i could take away your dark ...
Keep always smiling ...
Praying for you better health |
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| Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader) |
8/20/2003 |
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Reindeer,
ZThis is dark but it is also reflective of soul.
Excellent piece my sweet friend.
PJ |
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