by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie
Wednesday, September 03, 2003
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Standing in the shadows,
I feign indifference,
For those weak shallow creatures,
Crawling on the earth,
Extracting her blood,
A sacrilege performed in madness,
They do not heed the warnings,
Sent by the seraph of their God,
I wonder then,
If they will heed his warning,
When the fruit lies withered on the vine,
And they call his name
With wet lips,
Seeking to invoke his compassion,
With their irreverent bleating…
Like a marauder I shall come then,
Smuggle the good children,
Take them to the God
They fear so much,
And fear they should,
For his anger shall simmer awhile yet,
Hating the blasphemy done in his name,
They mutilate the truth,
Extracting what they need,
But they cannot hide from me,
Nor stand before God,
As belligerent children,
He is as yielding,
As the sky,
I shall watch them die,
As their cries of woe and sorrow,
Plays in the air like static,
And the dark angel shall laugh
With much glee,
What a glorious celebration
That night will be!
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|Reviewed by Jimmy Mills
|Rein--you outdone yourself here. Superbly written poetry that tells the truth about revelation. What may seem right at the beginning may feel very wrong at the end and you won't find out until you are pushed down South where no one wants to go. A winning masterpiece to say the least. Great work my friend. LC|
|Reviewed by Handsum Hart
|a terrific write, very original!!!!!!!|
|Reviewed by Jaclynn Huntington
|A most chilling read. Sometimes we need to see through the dark to appreciate the light.
|Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
|Hi Reindeer...wow this is well written and I have the shakes....floria|
|Reviewed by Russ Okamura
|Your poetry keeps getting deeper and deeper and more profound every time I read it. Your writing is extremely magnificent!|
|Reviewed by Christine Morell
|Awesome poetry, Reindeer. Chilling.
|Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader)
|Powerful and profound.|
|Reviewed by Digital Fairy
|Oooh.. this has a chilling air to it... splendid! :)
|Reviewed by Gaye Dale (Reader)
|Retta, an awesome and hideous picture of the powers of darkness. The shadowy side of brilliance!!!|
|Reviewed by Dale Clark
|Haunting and powerful work! It's awesome!|
|Reviewed by Tinka Boukes
|Very scary deep dark haunting but well written piece Retta!!
Oh And the Picture...it gave me the jitters!! Yuk!!
|Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya
|Excellent write my friend...I loved this excellent work from you much!!!|
|Reviewed by ***** ********* (Reader)
|You had me at the first line, Reindeer, this is BRILLIANT and that's no lie! This is full of SO many great lines, and fantastic images! I love this couplet:
"A sacrilege performed in madness,
They do not heed the warnings, "
So mythic and so haunting...! You're usually a wonderful writer, but this is EXCEPTIONAL! (By the way, love that picture to pieces!)
|Reviewed by jude forese
|a very powerful, deep poem that explores the realm of insightful darkness... "the devils are really angles waiting to be set free"|
|Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK
Dark Angels Are Trash Bin Babies Cloned , Clones!!
|Reviewed by Kate Clifford
|Great write and photo!|
|Reviewed by Floreann Cawley
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Yes dark and haunting well portrayed,rich in the underworld spirit...art an enhancement!|