Jack on the Loose
by Ronald W. Hull
Sunday, October 26, 2003
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Attempted as a song. Do any of those choruses tingle a guitar finger? My apolagies Jack Swanson, Buddy, R.I.P. |
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Jack on the Loose
You don't know Jack about what I say.
That's okay. I don't need you anyway.
Way back, there’s Jack in the sack.
Get back. Laid back. Jack won’t go away.
Jack is squirming, his mind is burning, his eyes are like fiery coals.
Don't let him loose, a world of abuse, a flurry of lost souls.
Jumpin Jack flash, the ultimate trash,
He’s only a gnat’s heartbeat away.
He'll get you when you least expect,
In the night of your day--beat, beating away.
Jack me up. Jack me down. Don't you dare, Jack me around.
Jack be nimble. Jack be quick. Don't you light my candlestick!
Jack's a jumpin. His heart is thumpin.
He's only one gnat’s heartbeat away.
Feel him on the back of your neck.
Turning a wild stray to gray.
Jack Sprat, eat no fat, skinny’s where it’s always at.
Skinny Minnie, shimmer and shimmy. Shake it. Shake no fat.
"Let me out, it's dark in here!"
It's not the darkness that you fear.
That is what Jack's about.
Makes you want to scream and shout,
Pop me up! Spring me out!
Shock me till I scream and shout.
Jack is your next of kin.
Don't let him get under your skin.
Once he’s there, Jack will crawl,
Make you want to climb the wall.
Lemmie in! Lemmie out! Jack me with your power!
Crawl me in the corner, Jack. Make me cringe and cower.
Jack be nimble, Jack be quick.
Let him out and you'll be sick.
Father, Son, and Holy Ghost,
Jack's the one to fear the most.
Jack be Jester, Jack be stout, twist me with the power!
Twist me left. Twist me right. Convulse me with your sour.
And so, when nights turn cold and dark and bleak.
For hooting of the owl you cannot sleep.
Please remember not to let Jack out,
For your intestine he will scream and shout.
Please, … don’t let Jack out!
Copyright 2003 © Ronald W. Hull
10/26/03
Photo © Dan Haskell, 2002
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| Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie |
1/10/2004 |
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I loved this! I could hear the music as I read! excellent!
Reindeer |
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| Reviewed by Katy Walsvik |
1/10/2004 |
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| Hey, Ron? Will a piano do? The very VERY first word that came to my mind here was 'infectious'... and then it just snowballed!! This is one damned great bunch of potential for a tune. After the first 2 lines, I was reading aloud.. it just begs for that! What a great piece you've penned. You know what a sucker I am for wordplay and snappy rhyme.. Well, THIS IS IT! Wonderful! katy xox. |
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| Reviewed by Ashraf Goreja |
1/8/2004 |
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Exceptionally beautiful.
Greetings. |
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| Reviewed by Divinity 11 |
1/4/2004 |
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a tickling play on words!
and i like the image with it
(knats) gnats???
jessica
aka
gypsie
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| Reviewed by serenety L |
11/8/2003 |
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Is it supposed to be funny?
Well, maybe I got something wrong. I thought it is scary.
Nevertheless, a joy to read.
Nico |
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| Reviewed by Patricia Gomes |
10/30/2003 |
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| Oh, Ron - too much fun to be had reading this. Love it! |
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| Reviewed by Regis Auffray |
10/28/2003 |
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| Lively piece that's fun to read. |
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| Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader) |
10/28/2003 |
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| This is a great song! Think you got the beat Ron. This was a joy to read. |
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| Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader) |
10/27/2003 |
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| Ronald this is definitely a song....loved it..floria |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
10/27/2003 |
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| Well I was singing it Ronald! Great images, wonderful rhythm, superb lyrics!So get a guitar;-)!Superb! |
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
10/27/2003 |
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Most interesting write!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by *********** ********** (Reader) |
10/26/2003 |
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| I love the beat of this poem Ron...You bring some fantastic images to mind...Very fine work....As you do! Loved it, ty, Dani |
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| Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson |
10/26/2003 |
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I won't hire that Jack leg...
I don't know where thaat phrase comes from
A fun write Ronald....... |
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| Reviewed by A PAX |
10/26/2003 |
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this is so clever!!! I am smiling! You have a GREAT PUMPKIN CHARLIE BROWN sense of humor!!!
love it
pax
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muu haaaaa haaaaaaaaaa |
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| Reviewed by T. Emilie Dybevik (Reader) |
10/26/2003 |
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I enjoyed this :) Perfect for this time of year...perfect timing. I am with Kate here 110%! This is really FUN. Read it to my little guy as well (5)...we have been reading together lots lately. I enjoyed ...he giggled and really liked it as well :) To that, I say... fine work!
Thank You,
Teresa Emilie |
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| Reviewed by Rodd Jokre |
10/26/2003 |
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| You made me smile Ronald! Thanks... Rodd |
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| Reviewed by Mr. Ed |
10/26/2003 |
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| This really kept my interest. Quite lively, and quite good! |
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| Reviewed by Evelyn Simon |
10/26/2003 |
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| Jack got me "all" jacked up. LOL! |
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| Reviewed by Jaclynn Huntington |
10/26/2003 |
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I think you've got too many pumpkin seeds left in your pie. (or too many hard ciders) **S** What a lively write. Loved the rhythm, energy and humor of this piece.
~Jackie~
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| Reviewed by Kate Clifford |
10/26/2003 |
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| This is a great lively play with words that keeps the reader tapping their toes while indigesting the thoughts. Great write! |
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