At gallows crossroads a ghost accompanies a ghost to its home.
A creaking tavern sign swinging to & fro in the rain mist.
When the light is on the rabit does it know deathīs near itīs neck!?
Daybreak binds an interrupted interval into memory.
The hand is worn that holds a lifeless form surrendered to dawn.
In the rain still uncertain which way to go dawn is creaking.
Bounded in the frame ghost at home swings, to & fro in the rain.
The other goes off into Picaresque scenario.
Bucholic landscape, gaunt on the skyline, lean, hungry & mean.
The valley people exclaim he has gone to the volcano.
The world spirals into a twin, the tavern sign grins, dawn creaks.
To & fro, under the volacano, the people come & go.
A phantom on the summit without a conjuring trick, lo,
what will he do, but out of the volacano give them his shoe.
Copyright Robin Ouzman Hislop 2003
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Under the Volcano
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|Reviewed by ***** ********* (Reader)
|An oddly macabre write, not quite horror, not truly fantastical, but undoubtedly sinister and grim... I love this line:
"Bucholic landscape, gaunt on the skyline, lean, hungry & mean."
This kind of wordplay fills the mind with darkly dreamy visions.
|Reviewed by Al Swanson (Reader)
|gee this was indeed a chiller, can still feel that sign swing, al|
|Reviewed by Oirdheirc Mor (Reader)
|Quite deep poem, I can not say, I was happy with your repetition of certain words, Rain and ghost got a bit boring, what was wrong with middling mists and spectral ghouls to maintain the picaresques senario.
Still all and all, a very good poem.
|Reviewed by Debashish Haar (Reader)
|Entire poem is a masterful work..I am especially moved by .."In the rain still uncertain which way to go dawn is creaking."..BRILLIANT work, Robin! To me this is the write of the day..
Your friend from India,
|Reviewed by Ch'erie de Perrot
|Well after having lived under a dormant volcano half me life, I'd say it would take more than a shoe to appease lol.
|Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya
|Robin....profound write my friend....great opening line....its catchy and very very deep.....but I think you have a little spelling error....rabit....isnot it rabbit.....excellent write once again....love n luck....BHUWAN|
|Reviewed by Kate Clifford
|Thought provoking write!|