What Ails Me
by Erin Elizabeth Kelly-Moen
Saturday, November 15, 2003
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Do I seem gloomy? Preoccupied
with visceral mind? Ineloquent
by design? Is it abnormal
to question all that comes before my eyes?
Should I level unbalanced head?
Plug my ears to voice within,
and shut my eyes to freedom-flight
of intellect not quite understood?
I ail because I am me, unique
in the way I see, bothersome at times,
but I don’t mind, perceptions depth
injects its breath into accumulated
reactions to environments of life.
Could I, if I was inclined, change
the temperamental nature of my beast?
Would I cease to feast and feel
and be devoured by abstract ideals?
Sanguineness has never been
a forte of mine. Shakily,
I laugh at myself, questions
about questioning stuck in my mind.
Do I ail?
Erin Moen
11/15/03
Copyright 2003 ©
Thanks, Eileen, for giving me the idea for this piece! :)
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| Reviewed by Leland Waldrip |
11/16/2003 |
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When it comes to questioning, Erin, there is nothing off limits, ever, even the act of questioning. This is the only way we learn. And it is obvious that you are one smart lady. You ask a lot of very thought provoking questions! Excellent prose in this piece.
Best regards,
Leland
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| Reviewed by Ed Matlack |
11/16/2003 |
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| Erin, I think Richard put it best on this one and I also have thought all along, since we first met, you are just as he says, & I have said all along, a master, headed for eventual greatness...Seems you have written your sister in laws passing right out of yourself, for the most part...excellent this one, writing seems to have a venting quality to it, does it not? Peace, Ed & Rufuz |
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| Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader) |
11/16/2003 |
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| Very well done and excellent expression. |
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| Reviewed by Ted Sheridan (Reader) |
11/16/2003 |
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| I have to say, I'm impressed. |
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| Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya |
11/16/2003 |
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| This is one of ure very best offering Erin....cheers...love n luck.....BHUWAN |
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| Reviewed by Kate Clifford |
11/16/2003 |
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| Strong questions and great write! |
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
11/16/2003 |
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Most interesting outstanding write Erin!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by Erin Kelly-Moen |
11/15/2003 |
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| No worries, Eileen. There's ailing, and ailing. "Trouble or afflict in mind or body", I was ailed in mind before her death, as witnessed by what I write, she was ailed in body, you gave me the nudge to define and accept that it is part of me, what gives me my 'style'. I feel relief, both in that and word that I received that there were hundreds of friends waiting to get into the funeral home to pay respect to Fran, she was much beloved. She will be sorely missed, but the love and respect of the light of herself she gave lifts some weight from my mind. |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
11/15/2003 |
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| Erin,you produce powerful unique thought provoking poetry all on your own;-)I hope you know I was referring to the death of your sister-in -law as being what there was no wonder drug for... |
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| Reviewed by Richard Vallance (Reader) |
11/15/2003 |
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Another forte from a very very strong and talented poet!
I am always pleasantly surprised by your wonderful talents at versification, Erin!
Oh, and BTW, don't worry about sonnet "rules". See the rather epic-length message I just sent you.
Just WRITE... You ARE a splendid poet, and you SHALL (future determinative) soon become a very fine sonneteer!
Mark my words!
Richard Vallance
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| Reviewed by Regina Pounds |
11/15/2003 |
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Intriguing.
Erin, I might say, 'as long as you laugh at yourself, all else is all right!'
I found this charming.
Gina |
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| Reviewed by Sandie Angel |
11/15/2003 |
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You don't have to change anything. Good write!
Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu :o) |
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| Reviewed by Robert Blackwell (Reader) |
11/15/2003 |
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| Fascinating write! |
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