How Dare You (for Trish's Challenge)
by Karla Dorman, The StormSpinner
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Judge not, lest ye be judged.
How dare you...
Unless you're right here where I am,
Your opinion ain't worth a damn,
You don't know me--you think you do,
Well, have I got some words for you,
You don't have a clue 'bout my life,
The troubles I have, or the strife,
You just don't have a single clue,
I'd keep my mouth shut, were I you,
You say I'm fat, can't deny it,
But you can't say that I'm not fit,
No car, must walk everywhere,
Ain't no life from an easy chair,
You say I'm not in pain? Yeah, RIGHT,
Pain twenty four seven, day, night,
Broken heart, o, to be set free,
Work for a boss that just don't care,
Disabled, no car--it ain't fair,
Have to stick it out, no schooling,
Can't afford it--I'm not fooling,
All my money goes to the bills,
God forbid if I should get ill,
Will I eat today? Maybe not,
Kinda used to goin' without,
I need to change my attitude?
You're the one that is being rude,
If you only knew where I've been,
Where to start, where should I begin?
If tears should start, they'd never stop,
The hurt, the pain, they've set up shop,
You just don't know what I've endured,
All the bullcrap, all the manure,
Try to pretend that's nothing's wrong,
Try to be friendly, get along,
But there are days when I'm a witch,
Wanna trade places, wanna switch?
How DARE you!!!!!!!!!!!!
(C) Karla Dorman, 2003
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|Reviewed by Jacqueline Druga-Marchetti
|I really enjoyed this. I wrote something like this for my sister once. It is great therapy. Well done, and very emotional.|
|Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper
|yes powerful rant of a write Karla. It makes you a superwoman to me. love and cheers. G|
|Reviewed by Michelle Kidwell Power In The Pen
|Powerful words Karla I have felt the same way at points in my life...
|Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader)
|Well I already called Karen, Karla today...lets see if I can mess this up...LOL....just have a bit of time on here...cooking one turkey today and its in the oven...You have met the challenge well Kala...too bad there arent more compassionate understanding people in the world..and your boss sounds like a crud....LOL....have a great thanksgiving...floria|
|Reviewed by Anna Marie Fritz (Reader)
|Reminds me of the old American Indian expression:
"Do not judge a man, until you have walked a mile
in his shoes." Good piece of work, here, Karla!
|Reviewed by Ed Matlack
|Karla, that was really cool, I like it when ur angry, (oooh baby!), LOL! I enjoyed that, you were telling the world to take a hike and telling it off at the same time, what a great way to do it! Peace, Ed & Rufuz|
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|Powerfully expressed. Well done. Thank you for sharing this offering. ...Regis|
|Reviewed by Tamara Dailey-Keur
|Wow! This is an amazingly strong poem! You Go Girl!|
|Reviewed by Mr. Ed
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Good for you Karla! Met the challenge head on!Well done!|
|Reviewed by Trish - The Trickster
|An excellent response write. Little fire in that engine, I see LOL!|
|Reviewed by - - - - - TRASK
|You Never Wanna Dare Me, TRASK,i.e. I Don't Never Ever Pretend!
Credit For The Write!
|Reviewed by Sue Hess
|i have to have my sis read this, i'm always telling her she hasn't a clue what i do or don't feel but she continues to judge me by her standards|
|Reviewed by m w
|Let it all out :)|
|Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado
*Wonderful* response to Trish's challenge, Karla; it's sure a great way to get some of our grinchiness out (just before the holidays, too; we DON'T NEED to be grinchy now; it's going to be Christmas soon! LOL)! Your anger and frustrations clearly shine in this powerful, emotive write; and you are a strong person because you have survived so much strife! And you shall continue TO survive; you are a WINNER, and you are COURAGE personafied! Thanks for sharing this emotion-filled vent!
Truly enjoyed reading~ This is going into my library!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your twin, Karen Lynn. :D
I am THANKFUL that you are MY sister, too; thanks for being there for me. I love you more and more each and every day!!
|Reviewed by Kate Clifford
|Fantastic response to the challenge! Glad to see you letting some steam out :-)|