A Perfect Day
by Scott D. Zachary
Sunday, December 07, 2003
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Bobbie's love spills over me like a silvery poetic shower.
A Perfect Day
By Scott D. Zachary
Awakened by the lips of an angel . . .
No purer view to a flawless day.
Gilded eyes sparkled like diamonds,
Lovingly exploring my soul’s recesses.
Hark! Bid low; won a small kingdom.
Hand-in-hand with my sweetest treasure,
We romped and explored our new lands.
Deer jettisoned like rockets before us.
From the pinnacle of our new realm,
She and I admired distant places.
We held each other close; a wind,
A bitter wind held us closer, yet.
In the middle of a broad grassy knoll,
I laid my angel down and kissed her.
Loving and grateful, she held me tight.
A perfect day transformed into night.
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|Reviewed by T. Emilie Dybevik (Reader)
|There is nothing like love. Absolutely nothing like it!
I loved this: "Lovingly exploring my soulís recesses." <--Ooooh! Word play is top notch! WHAT an image.
This is probably my favorite poem of yours. Excellent work.
|Reviewed by anne cunningham
|hey, the riddle drew me in, but i'm going to have to come back and read more of your work. this was too sweet. :) -anne|
|Reviewed by jude forese
|very lovely poem ... well written ...|
|Reviewed by Tami Ryan
|Awwww, Scott! This is so tender and sweet. Absolutely wonderful!
PS. You might want to rethink this line, as "worser" is improper: "Against my worser judgement, I didnít." (Certainly not that poetry has to be proper, but it doesn't read well. To use the word "worse" would be proper, but I don't know if that really works well.)
|Reviewed by Bonita Quesinberry
|A masterful write of such beauty and tender emotion, Scott. ~~Bonnie Q|
|Reviewed by Ed Matlack
|Scott, I get a smile everytime I read about the small kingdom & this is an excellent love poem as well...lucky Mrs Z!
Peace, Ed & Rufuz (w00f)