|Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
|Nope in my dialect the last line has a perfect 10, greats ways of reading this, well done:))|
|Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
|Wonderful Poem Sweetie.
|Reviewed by jude forese
|the last line is 10 syllables ... i am somewhat befuddled by the continuity of the motif ... many ways to read into it ... not that that's a bad thing ...|
|Reviewed by Sandie Angel
From the 1st line to the 3rd, this appears to be only a list of words; only the 4th and the 5th means something only you can understand. As a reader, I'm somewhat lost in this.
Are you talking about Mike? Is he gay? Is he not your friend yet? The last line puzzles me for I was lost in the first few lines...
I'm sorry if I had offended you...but it's only me and my 2 cents worth of opinion of myself reading this. Ah!...what do I know?
Sandie Angel a.k.a. May Lu :o)
|Reviewed by Kate Clifford
|Great fix! I think the last line has only 9 syllables. You need one more word. But I could be wrong.|