Birthing Entropy
by Erin Elizabeth Kelly-Moen
Saturday, December 27, 2003
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(she had a thought
and birthed…entropy)
Have you ever felt
you weren’t who you were?
There you are, being you,
then, you are not?
(its twisting gathered her up
frenetically soothing
her heartbeat’s fever)
Have you ever thought
you were someone else?
You are there, you-being,
then, you are not?
(she suppressed a thought
and birthed…collusion)
Have you ever smelled
the scent of fear
upon your skin
as your mind left you,
birthing entropy?
(it’s twining showed no caring
soothingly frenetic
her heartbeat fevered)
Have you ever felt
you weren’t who you were,
then you were not?
Erin Moen
12/27/03
Copyright 2003 ©
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
12/28/2003 |
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Very thought provoking write Erin!!
I think I had this feeling before!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by Carmen Ruggero |
12/28/2003 |
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Now don't laugh at me: you asked the question. I have at times felt there was another one of 'me' getting the goodies I wasn't. As usual, good write -- tight and clear.
Carmen |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
12/27/2003 |
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| If you birth unused energy and matter, you can feel irrelevant, which accounts for, seeing yourself different than who you a thought you were...;-) Okay don't get upset with me;-)...I love your mind-boggling puzzles Erin they are such fun and If I get them wrong so what! LOL |
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| Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper |
12/27/2003 |
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| Sounds like a dream Erin. and I wish I could make this new years resolution to quit eating and do it, but food is the devils tool. If he can't break you one way, eventually he'll get you with food. I'm really going to try and beat him this year. Love and peace G |
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| Reviewed by Kate Clifford |
12/27/2003 |
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| Now try watching who you are through your eyes. Who really is looking? |
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