Darkness on the inside
by jan nunn
Saturday, January 24, 2004
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a tad ..sad.I dare say it is a fleeting moment :)
Sad and lonely,hands in the air,
my white flag is flying,I surrender tonight.
My vessel is empty, sinking fast,
no more words of love,I give up the fight.
Trees stand tall,surrounding me ,
here I am embraced,here I breathe freely.
The sky is teasing,but the sun holds on,
a hundred bodies in sight , but not one near me.
The candles flicker,shadows on the wall,
dancing shadows my only company.
And I'm so tired from trying,
time to curl up in a shadow of my own
Dark night on the outside,dark night on the inside,
drapes hang heavy to the floor.
There's nothing more to be said of love
so I'm closing the windows and bolting the door.
And should anyone say'Hi how are you'
I'll wave a goodbye,and walk on past,
for if I've learnt anything from people who come,
I've learnt that no one nor nothing lasts.
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|Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader)
|Bloody better be, EVERYONE should know what a lovely lady you are, bright things will always come to pass, for you, Ed and you are both great animal lovers, glad to see you writting again..|
|Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader)
|Emotive and exquisite writing Jan!!!!!!|
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|Sad but wise. Reminds me a little of Dido's "White Flag." It's a song that I love. Thank you for this offering, Jan. Love and peace, Regis.|
|Reviewed by Lisa Hilbers
|Fleeting moments are exactly what times such as these need to be. As normal as they are, we can't allow ourselves to stay. Well done Jan. Lisa|
|Reviewed by E T Waldron
|Jan, methinks this is exquisite writing and you know how I identify with it...splendid write my friend...|
|Reviewed by Mr. Ed
|Truly sad, Jan, but we all must hope for a Brighter Dawn.|
|Reviewed by Debashish Haar (Reader)
|I agree>>I've learnt that nothing lasts. < <
Everything is ephemeral in this world..except their shadows and reminiscence!