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| Reviewed by Lena Kovadlo |
1/7/2013 |
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Since this poem has no punctuation I am assuming it should be read pausing at the end of each line. If I do that then the flow isn't smooth for me due to the formatting of the lines. I am tempted to structure the lines as such...
After our foray
into forbidden territory
the harsh light of dawn
has awakened my thoughts
and like bats
after a nocturnal frenzy of feeding
they flee
back to their dark abode
and with them
my short-lived false sense
of self-assurance and well-being
and I worry that I
might not be able to wait
for another night of forgetfulness
to bring them back
Doing that and reading the poem with a pause at the end of each line makes it flow better in my opinion.
Unless it is not meant to be read pausing at the end of each line. But then without punctuation how does one know where to pause if not at the end of each line. |
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| Reviewed by Inspire Hope |
4/1/2010 |
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I admire your honesty Regis! A very interesting write too, continue to share your gift! Be encouraged and may the Lord bless you with His presence and His peace!
Much Love,
Margaret |
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| Reviewed by Peter Schlosser (Reader) |
8/28/2009 |
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| Anticipation Regis. Tough one indeed. Nice work. Really enjoying perusing your stuff. |
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| Reviewed by Nicole Weaver |
7/12/2009 |
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Regis,
I now understand why I am so hooked on reading your verses. You are a master at evoking really sad emotions. I on the other, though not a master like you evokes good feelings. This was the only way I was able to survive the many emotional and physical abuses I was subjected to as a child. I was and to some degree still is a dreamer. I will read all of your poems because they are evoking some feelings that have been kept dormant too many years. Thank you for the ride.
Nicole |
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| Reviewed by A Serviceable Villain |
10/17/2008 |
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Regis,
'Painted' by the hand of a master poet . . . thank you for sharing!
Best regards,
Lance |
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| Reviewed by Michelle Mead |
4/26/2008 |
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| Intense and sexy, dark and passionate, liked this alot. Michelle To the library it goes, lol. |
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| Reviewed by Victoria's Poetry & Voices of Muse |
10/25/2007 |
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The Essecnce in Passions of Love's Lust
is Expressed Very Nicely In This Piece
Love & Hugs
Vickie |
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| Reviewed by Staci Gansky-Wagner |
10/18/2007 |
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| Very creative and somewhat dark in ways. |
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| Reviewed by Mary Quire |
12/10/2006 |
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This is a very powerful piece. We never truly know how our partner feels about us. It is that unknown that fuels many of these bat thoughts. Very well done.
Best wishes,
Mary |
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| Reviewed by Janet Bellinger |
3/19/2006 |
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An evocative depiction of early morning depression. Well done.
Janet |
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| Reviewed by Laura Via |
3/28/2004 |
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I must say the title drew me in then I saw the image and was like hmmm ... the write was darkly emotional, bled well on the paper.
Love & Light
Laura |
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| Reviewed by Fr. Kurt Messick |
3/5/2004 |
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| :-) |
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| Reviewed by MAGICKAL HuMMiNgByRd |
2/21/2004 |
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~*~ I am feeling a bit 'batty' now. Great Ominous Write! ~*~
~*~*~*~ Love, Shivani ~*~*~*~ |
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| Reviewed by Steve Joos |
2/21/2004 |
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| I like the imagery on this one. It does remind one of several other unpleasant, sleepless nights. |
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| Reviewed by Jim Dunlap |
2/20/2004 |
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| This is clever, and reminiscent of all too many dark nights of the soul, probably not just for me, but for all of us. Great pic. |
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| Reviewed by Abdi-Noor Mohamed (Eagle Of Hope) |
2/18/2004 |
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| This poem is truly descriptive with fantastic imagery. Great write. |
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| Reviewed by Jaclynn Huntington |
2/18/2004 |
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I love this connection!! Bring on the bats!!
♫ Jackie
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| Reviewed by Karen Cino |
2/18/2004 |
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Awesome write. I love the imagery and the feelings that you are conveying here. Another masterpiece you have shared with us.
Karen |
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| Reviewed by Christine Morell |
2/18/2004 |
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Outstanding creative poetry.Great imagery.
~Chrissie |
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| Reviewed by E. Richardson |
2/17/2004 |
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| this is well done, Regis...imagery and metaphor are concise. |
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| Reviewed by Trixie Love |
2/17/2004 |
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Fabulous write Regis...
I do enjoy your work!!!
Trixie :) |
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| Reviewed by Daniel McTaggart |
2/17/2004 |
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| imagery to power......metaphors to speed......ready to read, Batman! VROOOOOOOMMMMMM!!!! |
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| Reviewed by Floria Kelderhouse (Reader) |
2/17/2004 |
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Hi Regis this was really different and creative...made me think
of all the bats I have in my belfry...LOL...cloris |
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| Reviewed by Sandra Corona |
2/17/2004 |
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Your Bat thoughts are better than mine :)! Shall we rub shoulders so some of your talent could rub off onto me ?
:)Sandy |
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| Reviewed by Gwendolyn Thomas Gath |
2/17/2004 |
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"Bat Thoughts" a pleasure to read,
the alluring imagery is also unique!
Thank you for sharing.
Gwendolyn
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| Reviewed by La Belle Rouge (Reader) |
2/17/2004 |
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| Well penned and very thought provoking Regis. |
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| Reviewed by Cynth'ya cynthyaspeaks@gmail.com |
2/16/2004 |
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Hmmm . . . this reminds me of a guy who drank too much and woke up with an ugly woman. (No I'm not talking about you!)
(. . . I hope.) LOL
Seriously, this poem has wings.
blessin's Reg/is
cynth'ya |
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| Reviewed by No Longer Member (Reader) |
2/16/2004 |
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| a great write Regis......good job |
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| Reviewed by andrea coltman |
2/16/2004 |
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| Great imagery...loved it... best wishes Andrea |
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| Reviewed by Jo Janoski |
2/16/2004 |
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| Such motion and satisfying pictures in the mind. First-rate! I love this poem. |
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| Reviewed by M Flack |
2/16/2004 |
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Wow, nice trickery with words...
Very enticing and alluring. Well done... |
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| Reviewed by Bhuwan Thapaliya |
2/15/2004 |
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| Regis...another winner from you my friend....your imagery is very profound...love n luck...BHUWAN |
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| Reviewed by Eddie Thompson |
2/15/2004 |
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| ooooooo...i loved this...i'm tracking this author now! |
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| Reviewed by Simon Thurlow (Reader) |
2/15/2004 |
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| This really made me think. Excellent write Regis |
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| Reviewed by Karen Lynn Vidra, The Texas Tornado |
2/15/2004 |
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Incredible imagery in this poem, Regis; very well done!
(((HUGS))) and much love, your friend in Tx., Karen Lynn. :D |
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| Reviewed by OnepoetGem *the Poetic Rapper |
2/15/2004 |
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| hey Regis, when I first read the title, my first thought was my mother in law twice, (1)old mean bat (2) WITH A BAT. Anyway spooky good write. Glad you wasn't batting after anyone, as in Louisville slugger. cheers G |
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| Reviewed by Sheila Jones (Reader) |
2/15/2004 |
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Strong imagery, a most excellent piece, Regis!
Beautifully written!
Love, Sheila |
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| Reviewed by E T Waldron |
2/15/2004 |
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Regis your imagery and depth of feeling you reach in this poem is
incredible. Very creative work!Thanks for sharing;-) |
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| Reviewed by Rebekah Rosie Lang |
2/15/2004 |
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| Excellent poem and drawing too! |
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| Reviewed by Dale Clark |
2/15/2004 |
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| Very good work. Powerful and evocative. |
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| Reviewed by Connie Washburn (Reader) |
2/15/2004 |
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Cool poem - Love your work! I use to live by a home that had thousands of bats and they are such interesting little creatures.
We never had mosquitos until the home became condemned and the bats boarded out. The idea of thoughts like bats after a nocturnal frenzy of feeding in forbidden territory was so original and fun! |
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| Reviewed by Katy Walsvik |
2/15/2004 |
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| Who of us doesn't recognize the night as a kind of cloak... but you take the mind further here.. your visuals are vivid, your night/day comparison stark and so honest. Cool piece, REgis! katy xox. |
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| Reviewed by Andrea Da Costa (Reader) |
2/15/2004 |
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Quite a haunting poem with strong imagery
Well done!
Andrea |
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| Reviewed by Lori Moore |
2/14/2004 |
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| Very good. Love the ending. |
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| Reviewed by Tinka Boukes |
2/14/2004 |
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Excellent imagery Regis!!
Must say I don't like bats...they are full of goggo's!!
Love Tinka |
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| Reviewed by Bonita Quesinberry, R.C. |
2/14/2004 |
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| Must have been a good dream, that you want to go back to it. I like the metaphor of "Bat Thoughts." Well done, Regis, very well done. ~~BonnieQ |
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| Reviewed by Sandie Angel |
2/14/2004 |
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Bats are lovely creatures that are often misunderstood as mysterious and scary. Good thought-provoking piece.
~ May / Sandie ~ |
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| Reviewed by Marie Wadsworth |
2/14/2004 |
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| I like bats and you capture their mystique and mystery well here. |
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| Reviewed by Marilyn Seray |
2/14/2004 |
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| great write, Regis |
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| Reviewed by E Detetcheverrie |
2/14/2004 |
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| I love the night! Someday (somenight?) I'll return to my old nocturnal ways and forget exactly what the sun looks like and all that it reveals. Very nice piece...bats are so cool! |
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| Reviewed by Linda Hill |
2/14/2004 |
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Awesome write, and artwork...
Loved this
Your Virgina Friend, *Linda* |
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| Reviewed by Nancy D. |
2/14/2004 |
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Vivid imagery, great writing.
Nancy |
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| Reviewed by Ron (sketchman) Axelson |
2/14/2004 |
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| Cleaver Regis... |
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| Reviewed by Lady Peg (Reader) |
2/14/2004 |
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Regis so very creative... Loved the imagery too.
Peg |
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| Reviewed by Retta (Reindeer) Mckenzie |
2/14/2004 |
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This was excellent! loved the imagery here!
Reindeer |
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| Reviewed by Ed Matlack |
2/14/2004 |
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2/14/2004 |
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Hi Regis,
When in the dark of nights foray
What pleasures face we do portray
Such wily warlocks seeks the sky
With moments thought, alone may I.
I love watching, the Bats at night, they are so harmless.
You have some good metaphors
Hesione Rhadamanthus.
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| Reviewed by William J. Cryer (Reader) |
2/14/2004 |
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| Spectacular delve into the metaphor...brilliant! |
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| Reviewed by Denise Edwards |
2/14/2004 |
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| Awesome write, Regis! Very vivid imagery! |
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| Reviewed by Andy Turner (Reader) |
2/14/2004 |
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| Fangs for this, great stuff |
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| Reviewed by George Carroll |
2/14/2004 |
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| The imagery is great as is the poem |
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| Reviewed by Kate Clifford |
2/14/2004 |
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| Profound write! |
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| Reviewed by Larry Rochelle |
2/14/2004 |
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| I think this shows your thoughts haven't flown too far away! |
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| Reviewed by Jill Eisnaugle |
2/14/2004 |
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Wonderful imagery, Regis. Happy Valentine's Day.
Jill :) |
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| Reviewed by Anna Marie Fritz |
2/14/2004 |
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What extraordinary imagery, Regis!
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| Reviewed by J. Pajot |
2/14/2004 |
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Wonderful write on the feelings of second thoughts and post experience anxiety. Wonderful metaphor. All good things to you,
Jim. |
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