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| Reviewed by Sarah Grenon (Reader) |
3/24/2009 |
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| Hi-Mom so far it sounds like a cool story-keep up the good work.I'm proud of you.Love You Lots! |
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| Reviewed by Sophia Ann Montoya |
8/6/2008 |
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| It's a beautiful prose poem. Will you be writing the entire book in this style or will you also have dialog and action scenes? That was very kind of you to share an excerpt from your future book. Well, done. |
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| Reviewed by Jill curry (Reader) |
7/9/2008 |
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| kudos, this is exquisite and my kinda book, i shall be coming back for more |
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| Reviewed by Cryssa C |
2/15/2008 |
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I like it! The easy way your story flows (and I love it in the poetic form! I think children need to see more poetry to appreciate it...) along with the subject matter sounds great for grade 6 and under (I don't know if anyone older would admit to wanting to read a story about friendship with a dragon as they might think that it is too "juvenile.") But... I think some of the words might be difficult for most children to understand unless they read it with a dictionary. Words like "duress" and "perused" "fervor" It is a treasure trove of vocab words! :~) So... I think it is subject-wise a 3-5 grade book, but because of the vocab I would probably put it more in the 6-9 grade realm of reading. I don't know if that was your intended audience or not.
My favorite portion of this chapter is
"Fear kept others far from his discerning
fire - breathing smile
till he touched her heart with his magic spark"
I love the imagery and the metaphors in that line!
I would love to see this story in a picture book with beautiful rich pictures done in a rather whimsical fashion. It would be a true heirloom to be shared over and over again with parent and child (or I guess even read by the children themselves).
I guess I wrote my own book... sorry. :~)
Cryssa
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| Reviewed by Blondie Clayton |
12/26/2007 |
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Spent an hour reading some of your writes. Love your style: playful, light, fun, enough detail to capture the imagination without slowing the reader down.
Plan to come back.
Blondie |
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| Reviewed by Mary Coe |
8/27/2007 |
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| Good imagery. A good first chapter. |
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| Reviewed by S Cardin |
8/27/2007 |
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| Very creative. I agree - I loved the imagery used here. It was a sweet meeting. The writing is very easy to read. Well done. |
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| Reviewed by stephen weinstein |
7/29/2007 |
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| Reviewed by Cynth'ya Reed |
7/15/2007 |
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Could be a metaphor for a poison relationship with a curious, cautionary tone. Adolescents might be very interested in reading this, as many are drawn to fantasy and Anime-type stories. The simplicity of the story is always a challenge for me as a writer. However when writing for children, of any age, it's always good to go back to where they are and I'm sure you'll be "interviewing" your own kids as to what they'd love to see in this story!
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| Reviewed by Mary Lynn Plaisance |
6/27/2007 |
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I like it! I love the use of "she found his gentle power."
Keep up your good work.
Peace and Love
Mary Lynn Plaisance
Mama of the Cajun Fairies |
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| Reviewed by Sandra Mushi |
6/10/2007 |
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Excellent first chapter! I love the imagery, Shee! Did you do it? Great stuff!
God bless,
Sandie. |
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| Reviewed by P-M Terry Lamar |
5/26/2007 |
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As Karen said, the imagery leaves a clear picture in the readers mind. Wonderful. Lovely creation.
Terry |
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| Reviewed by Joyce Bowling |
5/9/2007 |
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Enjoyed this Shee, great imagery...can't wait to read more!
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling |
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| Reviewed by Karen Cino |
5/8/2007 |
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Awesome opening, Shee. The imagery in here is excellent. I can already picture the characters. Glad you took my advice.
~hugs~
Karen |
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| Reviewed by William Haynes |
5/6/2007 |
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nice images of the dragon and the girl, looking forward to more
Bill |
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| Reviewed by LadyJtalks LadyJzTalkZone |
5/6/2007 |
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| Of course you know I love dragons and they make woderful friends. For the children her story could be simply spoken and it will inspire others to speak theirs. Lady J |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
5/6/2007 |
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Wonderful and enticing opening to what I am sure will be a warm children's book that even the child in all of us will enjoy. Very nice Shee.
Fee |
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| Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan |
5/6/2007 |
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| i read these backward but... love the feeling of safety for both the girl and the dragon- |
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