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| Reviewed by Sarah Grenon (Reader) |
3/24/2009 |
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| HI MOM-i READ PART 2 OF THE DRAGON STORY-SO FAR I LIKE IT ALOT.KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.I'M PROUD OF YOU. |
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| Reviewed by Gwendolyn Thomas Gath |
7/10/2008 |
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This was again quite interesting how about asking Sandie Angel she's fantastic at story telling.
Take care and thank you~have fun,
~Gwendolyn
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| Reviewed by Cryssa C |
2/15/2008 |
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Again, enjoyed the characterizations here, but still think the vocab might be cumbersome to a younger reader. :~)
Any more to share with us??
Cryssa :~) |
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| Reviewed by Mary Coe |
8/27/2007 |
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| Nice job. Enjoyed the read. |
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| Reviewed by P-M Terry Lamar |
5/26/2007 |
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You're getting some excellent advice from those who know much more about this than I do. I will only say that I love the presentation and the development. I look forward to the rest.
Terry |
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| Reviewed by Joyce Bowling |
5/9/2007 |
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Sounds like it's going to be a fun write. Great characters as well. This seems to be about a third to fifth grade reading level. I think the style would be fine it doesn't seem overwhelming and that always makes a book more appealing to this age group! If a book looks to wordy they will often put it back on the shelf...unless they are an avid reader. I agree with Karen, this is getting good! Enjoyed!
Blessings,
Joyce Bowling |
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| Reviewed by Karen Cino |
5/8/2007 |
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This is magical, Shee. Seeing where it is going, I would say that it would be geared more to 9 to 11 year olds. I will read both again. Keep writing...this is getting really good.
~hugs~
Karen |
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| Reviewed by Georg Mateos |
5/7/2007 |
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If I wag my tail...will I be forgiven?
Great mystical poem.
Georg |
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| Reviewed by William Haynes |
5/6/2007 |
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paints a nice opening
bill |
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| Reviewed by H Cruz |
5/6/2007 |
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Hey, nicely done! This could be a poem as well.
Don't you ever sleep? |
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| Reviewed by LadyJtalks LadyJzTalkZone |
5/6/2007 |
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| You've got a good start. Best way I find to lay my stories out is I write a chapter out with a theme for that one. Each chapter apiece of the whole. I try to make one point or draw one picture with those words. After I write it out I read down through slowly and fill in where it seems to be missing something or with something else I think of for it. Lady J |
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| Reviewed by OnepoetGem * |
5/6/2007 |
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| great fun creative, as far as your questions it depends, in poetry and verse like you have it, in page and book style you might want to expand your story out. Then again this depends on you too. I'm writing a story now in which the introduction is a poem centered, similar to your off set above, but the rest of the layout is in page format. Have a sunshine day, love you my dear, I'll b back, hey didn't Arnold say that |
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| Reviewed by Felix Perry |
5/6/2007 |
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Mystical and magical ride through the world of princess and dragons and a kingdom in the sky. Well done Sweet Shee.
Fee |
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| Reviewed by Karen Vanderlaan |
5/6/2007 |
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| I like the fantasy element here-prompted by the picture, I think the format is a god one perhaps for a childs book, but also, pre-teens are going crazy with the fantasy thing-i think this "friend" idea offers a port in a storm for kids who might need that--an imaginary friend per-say--anyway, just some rambling thoughts- |
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