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The Garden of Eden
By Crissy M Foster
Sunday, March 04, 2007

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I figured I would toss up a theory that I had when I was 12 years old. This is obviously not a testiment of fact but it's a different theory that is interesting.
Ignore all the grammer errors for those who actually read this. I have never written a short story before. This is just one of many theories I will probably write.

The good lord and mother earth had a great many children to be sure. They lived in a land far above the one we dwell in now. They called it heaven.

This world was a world of peace and tranquility, love and prosperity, hope and encouragement.


Of they many children Father God and Mother earth had together, there was one in particular of which we speak. They named him Lucifer.

Lucifer was the eldest of all the children, he was the most like his father then any of the others. Although all the other children were born with traits of God Lucifer had them all, He was the most powerful, Dominant, and Convening. This man knew how to look deep into your soul and know where he stood with you. As we all know however, Power can leave to envy and envy to greed.

At a ripe young age Lucifer began to take things for granted. He began to grow tired of his brothers and sisters constantly coming to him for guidance and help. (As all eldest children do).He began to feel he was being taken advantage of. He never had any time to himself without having a brother or sister following him asking him questions.

One day he approached his father on this subject. “Father,” he said, “ I grow tired of these children pestering me constantly. I receive no privacy, no time to do what I want to do. I am constantly taking care of their needs and none of my own. I help them grow powerful and teach them how to use their powers, I show them how to create and guide them on compassion and understanding, they grow from me and learn from me and I get nothing in return. I am treated the same as all of them and they are not even half as powerful as I.”

“You will receive your reward my son. Look at how they have grown and how much they look up to you. Michael is becoming more powerful every day. And you have done well teaching Gabriel compassion for others. Watch what fine men they grow in to. That is your reward. You must not take advantage of that son, for those men are of our very own souls and it is something to be treasured.

You mustn’t be prideful son for with pride comes bigger consequences then you know. You must love your brothers and be proud of them.

There are a great many things in this life that you do not yet know. There is still a great deal to learn.”

“I have learned all I need to learn father and what I know is that I should have a great portion of this palace for myself. I do most of the work around here with the kids and I deserve my own section of heaven!”

“You know nothing son! You know not of hate, resentment, greed, pride, anger, need, famine, fear, sadness or any emotions at all. You have no idea what those feelings are because you have never felt them. You will only truly know anything when you experience them for yourself. You are not ready for that. Do not become prideful my son or that will be your undoing.”


On his way back to his house he had a line a mile long of his brothers and sisters who adored him. The questions they hammered him with and the comments and the stories he no longer cared about. He shut the door on his family and tried to take in his fathers words but to no avail.

The old man has gone insane.

Then he had an idea! He opened the doors to his room and called his brothers inside. “Brothers!” he said, “We are beginning to have a problem. Our father is growing ill. He speaks of such ramblings as feelings such as sadness and oppression, he speaks of anger and pain, famine and need. Such ramblings are of a mad man. I feel he cannot take care of us well anymore. Therefore I believe you should follow on my words. Let me guide you, I have for years shown you how to do many great things and I will show you many more. Father simply cannot run this palace anymore with his failing mental health and I feel that it is my duty to relieve him of his throne.

Michael and Gabriel over heard this and ran the news straight to their father who stood strong and listened intently. When Gabriele had finished telling the news Michael dropped to his knee. “Father, I do not understand why he would do this unless he believes this is true . If you are to ill to fight him father I shall do it for you.”

Michael, you are a great man, dedicated and headstrong but you must pace yourself. Do not be so eager to be forceful, for sometimes destruction isn’t the answer.”

God went to Lucifer’s home and his voice ripped through the crowed like thunder. “Lucifer! You dare to defy me? To rebel against your own father?”

“You are weakened father” stated Lucifer, “You cannot rule against us anymore.”

“Weak? You know nothing of weak son and I cannot have you poisoning my children with your thoughts of rebellion. If you truly believe I am weak we must fight.”

God took Lucifer to the outskirts of Heavens gates and the brothers and sisters looked from the sidelines. God took a breath and blew into the deep crevices of the universe and out shined many bright balls of gas that burned brightly into the nothingness. He then created a small universe to which we call Earth. “This is henceforth known as the garden of Eden. LET THERE BE LIGHT!” He shouted. And a great light shined on the planet. When this light shines for the sixth time on Eden you must have defeated me or you shall be cast down upon it. I give you all the rocks in the outer spaces to use as weapons against me and if you win you shall own this palace.”

And so the fighting commenced. For many days Lucifer threw meteors at God and failed. During this time God grew bored of dodging his son and so began to create on earth to pass the time. He made water to flow and land to live on. After all he loved his son still and wanted a place for him to rule that was decent and livable. However, he simply could not have his children poisoning the minds of his others. Lucifer was the 666th child of his who now believed he was to weak to rule heaven.

On the beginning of the sixth day Lucifer was passed out on the grounds outside of heaven to weak to move and God came to him. “My son, I cannot condone what you do and I cannot have you here turning my children. If you think you can raise them better then I then you shall have your chance. I am giving you the palace that you felt you deserve. You will be cast down to Eden but you will not be alone like you so wanted. You will take with you the children you poisoned against me. Since I cannot trust that this will never happen again with my other children you will all know the feelings that you know nothing of. There will be no evidence of existence when you arrive. You will only live off faith. Those who live through the feelings you will be given and still believe may come back. Those who cannot believe through those feelings will turn against me as you have Lucifer. This is the only way I can ensure that my children will not turn on me again. You will have flesh and blood and when you prick you will bleed. Your only solace is each other. I pray you all will do well.

However, you Lucifer must remain out of sight so as not to give away my existence to the others so you will be cast down as a serpent. The others will have no memory of ever living here. But I will allow you to remember so you can remember everything that you gave up. Michael and Gabriel you may stay with me here for you are the only two who came to me with this news. You two will help me. Gabriel you will be in charge of letting the others in when they come back. Michael, you are now in charge of enforcing the punishment we will certainly have on that planet.”

On that day he cast down his first born child to the new world and the earth saw rain on that day as a symbol of Gods heart wrenching goodbye to his most powerful son and all the sons who followed suit.

Adam his youngest and most easily swayed now was flesh and blood and was the first to arrive in the Garden of Eden.


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Reviewed by Brett Moore 3/9/2007
Really intriguing story. Tightly structured and well paced, I never got bored reading it. On the contrary. There was a building tension throughout and the ending was perfect. Well done.

Reviewed by cecil hickman 3/5/2007
your story has real depth in possibilities of the heappenings as well has compassion and evil placed seperated and guided as well some lost, you should definitely keep writing, I enjoyed your writing very much so,,,blessings...Cecil
Reviewed by Regis Auffray 3/5/2007
Thank you for sharing your take on the "creation" of this planet, Crissy. Love and peace to you,

Reviewed by Michael Mathieu 3/5/2007
Keep on writing Crissy,More,more,Wonderful job my friend,easy to understand,
Well said,

Reviewed by Felix Perry 3/5/2007
Wow, this is certainly a great explanation and worded for easy comprehension of a topic that is not always easy for the young to grasp. Well done.

Reviewed by Joyce Devenish 3/4/2007
Clever, tricky story. Enjoyed it...Joyce M.

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