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Surreal Dummy
By Odin Roark
Posted: Friday, July 20, 2012
Last edited: Friday, July 20, 2012
This short story is rated "PG" by the Author.

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Some flash fiction on the art of seeing what is arguably important to be seen.

Surreal Dummy

Wasn't always this way
didn't ask for retirement
5th Ave suited me fine
but
new is new
old is old
or so i'm made to believe

no longer a mannequin
just a small town dummy in a window now

miss the noise of energy on fire
the cab horns
sirens
boy
lots of sirens
the subway below
rattling my window above
a kid's ice cream hands
smudging the glass
while nanny flirts with the dog walker

people
and more people
the persistent gaze of wanting
passing-window-temptation highs
after-window-temptations lows

back at Saks i saw it all
even the priest from across the street
St Patrick's walls housed his soul
but I owned his lust for Armani

what stayed consistent though
was the gaze of dogs
on 5th Ave they'd stand patiently
while their master squinted
tilted head
craned neck
and dreamed

the dogs?

well I knew they knew
were it not for the window
shielding me
i'd be his next tree trunk
fire hydrant
or lamppost marking

here at Seth's Mercantile
Tishamingo Oklahoma's finest
i'm dressed in a cheap
Sunday-go-to-meetin' suit

got this cute little number
standin' next to me
female dummy in white lace and frills
even a white straw hat
just like Easter on 5th Ave

forced retirement sucks
i could complain
but I won't

we get lots of looks
specially from the bib overall types
whether the farmer
or the farmeress
they look at me different
not like city folk
less want
more need
you know

novel as hell
when you think about it really

and the dogs?

they just glance
lift a leg
and do it
‘need' winnin' out again
eh
gets my glass cleaned daily
why complain

retired and livin' out my days
livin' out my days

but i've seen more
than some might think i've seen
a lot more
i've seen people
and dogs do things
when they thought no one was looking

my dresser says that's what it's all about
like a fly on the wall
he says
don't know what he means
but got plenty of them down here
the flies
I mean
all seemin' to love hangin' out in my window
hell of a way to deal with loneliness
ya know?

damn

buz
buzz
buzzzz


 

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Reviewed by m j hollingshead 5/31/2014

holds reader interest
Reviewed by Diana Legun (Reader) 7/23/2012
Seeing what is important to be seen rather encompasses your writing eye, Odin. " . . . the noise of energy on fire" excellent pose of city profile. Your window temptations' highs and lows - - a unique way of saying 'would like' and 'can't have.' And then to have that converted to just plain 'need it'. This "Surreal Dummy" is left off with a 'shrug' effect that is perfect for how I've seen individuals, dynamic in their youth, vibrantly telling of when they were 'a real person'....the "I used to be.." sigh..."oh well, what can you do?" This writing brings out the emotional identity, much like The Velvetine Rabbit story does-- and I see at the end of your piece, a vision of sag and resign, a cross between scarecrow and clown with sad eyes. ~~ Diana
Reviewed by Ronald Hull 7/21/2012
It's not a novel, but it sure is. No dummy behind that character! This one would make a great little short film. Keep up the good work.

Ron
Reviewed by Jerry Bolton 7/20/2012
Everybody is sizing down these days, even the dummies in the windows. Sad. Sad.


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