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I think this is a place where most of us has been at one time or another. I'm glad to say I'm not there now and haven't been for a long long time, but I can still remember the feeling vividly.
no wedding rings
just silly strings
and broken promises
in empty premises.
No more hope
no more chemistry, signal substanse dope
it all came crashing down
love has abandoned this waste of a town.
Say this, say that,
what's this, what's that?
illusions and dreamscapes
in different colorful shapes
there's no denying
the hold they have on me is dying.
No more dreaming
no more tinted screening
reality took a choke hold,
left me out in the cold
for sobering eyes to see
it was never really you and me.
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|Reviewed by Jason Wise
|Well written. I enjoyed the last few lines most of all.|
|Reviewed by J M
|this is great write...
on this very day
i can relate to this all to well...
and WoW---this last line really captures me...
a wonderful-wonderful poem...
|Reviewed by Rose Rideout
|I believe we all have suffered this feeling Elizabeth but we pick ourselves up and soon realize there is one person who is indeed perfect for us. Great write.
Newfie Hugs, Rose
|Reviewed by Jon Willey
|once we have crossed the span of humiliation to the far side and look back -- we can at last see truth was always hiding in our unrealistic desires -- nice work Elisabeth, an enjoyable read my friend -- may peace and love be with you -- Jon Michael|
|Reviewed by Paul Judges
|Powerfully written, Elisabeth|
|Reviewed by John Flanagan
|You have come through, Elisabeth, and can look back with a certain detachment and a sense of relief. This memory and the attendant feelings are finely stated.
|Reviewed by Felix Perry
|Yes, not too many get through this world without knowing the ache of a broken heart and you captured this well here.
|Reviewed by Regis Auffray
|You are right, Elisabeth. There is no doubt that many of us can relate to this sad but timeless theme. Thank you. Love and best wishes to you,